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lucky
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0 posted 03-26-2000 04:40 PM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for lucky

lost it


 



[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 06-01-2000).]
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Janet Marie
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1 posted 03-26-2000 04:53 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

powerful poem...very dark and strong images...
you should show work like this over in Dark Passions...they will enjoy it.
take care, jm

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Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
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2 posted 03-26-2000 05:50 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

I love the layout of this one.  Very nice job!!  I agree with JM, dark passions for sure.  This is powerful, yet mysterious.  

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3 posted 03-26-2000 08:47 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Lucky~

Great big *sighs* at your talent, my friend.

'I saw what my eyes couldn’t
beseeched by a mirror unbroken by my image screaming with ideals on nights filled with deafening silence'

Your feelings are powerful.
The presentation ... *sighs*
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Martie
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4 posted 03-26-2000 09:24 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

When I read this I feel like I'm looking right into your raw and naked feelings...they have exceptional emotional pull on me....Hugs!
hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 03-27-2000 10:29 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

WOW!! This is an exceptionally emotional and powerful poem.  
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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6 posted 03-27-2000 08:49 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

What a deep and complex poem this is!  I just need to let you know how it calls to me.

There are so many unique, intriguing and original ideas rolled into one here that speak directly to my heart!

A mysterious, yet clear need -
"I shunned my satiety with emerging hunger",

A darkened grief of shadowed hopelessness -
"but then unyielding obstinate night came
solitary cold with frank blisters of my decaying self..."

And what a painfully stark and vivid portrait this:
"a still-born whose vast unplowed heart hears only indifference from interiors bleeding".

Then, as strong as the ocean's crashing, incoming tide, this truth -
"the mystique dream while life’s reality exerted its every whim."

Ah, thank you for sharing.  If I read it differently than you meant it, please forgive me, but I love it!

lucky
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7 posted 03-27-2000 11:14 PM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

Cheese,

I goose I better be sayin' sumpthin' to ya all's.

So Janet, your over in "dark P" huh... I give it some thought. Mean while I'll take a squint.

Lone W. your kinda like me wife "Mysterious"

Marge,
If I stopped to sigh at all your post I'd never get any writing done. Could that be why I'm losing it. I gotta do something 'bout this sighin.

Now Martie,
I'm so touched be your sentiments "looking right into your raw and naked feelings" and such. You appear to have a few of your own.

Ruth
I'm so touched that you would even notice. A great compliment from a great lady (and I have been learning a bit from you... shhh)

RJG
What do yu mean "a deep and complex poem" I been trying to figure you out for years. You do know there are the unborn struggling for a life not yet manifest who scream to be, but I'll never tell.
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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8 posted 03-27-2000 11:54 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Ah, bie-bee, I thought you knew everything about me ... but, yes, ah, I know, we're both deep and mysterious; this probably adds to the magnetic effect, drawing us ever closer together.

We love it, don't we - ever learning more about each other!!!?!!!

I love you, my thiry-seven year love - my mystery, my passion, my yearning, my learning, my darling, my past, my present, my future ... I love you.




 ...Living is ever like crossing rivers; finding a new life on each shore ... RJG


lucky
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9 posted 03-29-2000 04:24 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

Rosey Bubba,

   I did know everything... Then I was born, and along came you and, what's this "we're" stuff (sounds like there's one to many in there for me to deal with) and what's this "magnetic effects" your referring to. I'm a right handed batter and your in left field. But you know one thing babe..? You ARE a mystery, why do you go telling people how old I am. Now everybody's gonna know I'm 38.
 
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