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The Butterfly

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Miss.Queeny
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0 posted 03-26-2000 03:54 PM       View Profile for Miss.Queeny   Email Miss.Queeny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Miss.Queeny

Hey - I am sorry for not posting replies to alot of the poetry here, my computer is slow and inadequate. I promise to change this situation, it is not me that pays the phone bill after all.
I would like your advice --- is this poem finished ?

The Butterfly :

The blood from my arm must have created it,
the butterfly that darted and sank
infront of me on the stairs.
I could almost see the
blood
on it's wings -
a sign -
I did not want to break it,
soil it,
hurt it.
It's fragility frightened me,
a blundering, uncomfortable, mutilated fool.
It's wings held the whole world,
in their tiny globes of
creme and yellow and blue.
It's wings held the whole world,
and all my teachings were
emptiness
when compared to this.
And so impure,
because they taught me to doubt
everything
and anyone
and God.
They had installed the hate in me,
and now my butterfly had taken it away
in it's world of other's troubles.

*** Be honest,

Love, Peace and Emptiness...Q xxx

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1 posted 03-26-2000 04:24 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Sounds good to me!  

Elizabeth


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-The Crucible

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2 posted 03-27-2000 10:17 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Sounds finished to me  
mete out
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since 02-16-2000
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3 posted 03-28-2000 10:18 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Queeny,
This is amazing.
So beautiful, and with a huge sting in it's tail.
Why didn't you share your talent with me sooner?!  
I think it is perfect, finished to me...

All my love,
  x L x


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


 
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