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My Eyes

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David2
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0 posted 03-26-2000 09:41 AM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for David2

My Eyes

When burdened with the unforgiving fear,
That love you've shared may well be love in vain.
Ask not for flowered words to soothe your ear,
But search my eyes for proof your love remains.
My eyes, immersed in you, could never lie,
They offer you a glimpse into my heart.
Now with your kisses dry the tears I cry,
And watch the fears of loving lone depart.
Though feeble words fall short of their intent,
And deeds may never satisfy your need,
Just gaze into my eyes for your content,
And leave your doubts to wither and recede.

What then the flaws of deeds and words conceal,
My eyes the depth of perfect love reveal.


© Copyright 2000 David William La Belle - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-26-2000 10:52 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Good..they are the windows to our soul....  
Nan
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Another great one, David... You might consider submitting some of your work to the main site for permanent posting.. Check it out if you haven't - It's an awesome place..
Munda
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3 posted 03-26-2000 01:07 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Awesome sonnet David ! I love it.  

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4 posted 03-26-2000 01:37 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Argh, Munda stole the words right out of my mouth!   uhm, Excellent Sonnet   I love it  
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5 posted 03-26-2000 01:43 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Excellent poem....the eyes speak volumes about us all.  This was very good!!

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6 posted 03-26-2000 03:24 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

When burdened with the unforgiving fear,
That love you've shared may well be love in vain.
Ask not for flowered words to soothe your ear,
But search my eyes for proof your love remains.
My eyes, immersed in you, could never lie,
They offer you a glimpse into my heart.
Now with your kisses dry the tears I cry,
And watch the fears of loving lone depart.

--------------------

*SIGH*
David...this poem is EQUISITE...TRULY!!!
I love it...such depth and sweet devotion...
wow...you expressed this one with such grace...
I am really taken with this poem...
very very nice,
take care, jm


 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman

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7 posted 03-26-2000 03:25 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is so beautiful, David!

Denise
Janet Marie
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just stopped by for another read...Im printing this one out...for future reads(smile) back to the top... this one goes
take care jm

 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
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If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman

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This is wonderful poetry, David!
Destiny
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10 posted 03-27-2000 02:45 PM       View Profile for Destiny   Email Destiny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Destiny

"My eyes, immersed in you, could never lie"

nor could they, lost there, love deny
and still no matter how i try
they give my heart away...

beautiful work David...

Destiny

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11 posted 03-27-2000 06:53 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

This is a beautiful sonnet... keep up the good work!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
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Well done, enjoyed.
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Your gift for writing is lovely...as is this piece.

~ Claire
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You are indeed a true craftman of your art, David. Another excellent piece.
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Impressing.  I wish I had that kind of talent
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When burdened with the unforgiving fear,
That love you've shared may well be love in vain.
Ask not for flowered words to soothe your ear,
But search my eyes for proof your love remains.
My eyes, immersed in you, could never lie,
They offer you a glimpse into my heart.
Now with your kisses dry the tears I cry,
And watch the fears of loving lone depart.
Though feeble words fall short of their intent,
And deeds may never satisfy your need,
Just gaze into my eyes for your content,
And leave your doubts to wither and recede.

===========================


this will always be a fave of mine...
and it MUST be read aloud to be done justice...its cadence is as smooth as butter...its such a lovely write...

When burdened with the unforgiving fear,
That love you've shared may well be love in vain.


I have always loved its opening two lines..they are poetically stunning....

and then the intend of these two....

But search my eyes for proof your love remains.
My eyes, immersed in you, could never lie,


yep...this one is a *sigh* just waiting to happen.
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17 posted 11-08-2003 11:41 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

David~
My ... my ... my~
Each one I read just gets lovelier and lovelier~

You are indeed a craftsman of the art~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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you do these quite well
 
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