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Of a wild love

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Severn
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0 posted 03-26-2000 07:21 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

Come to me
        
      you
    
of the alone
     the prey
       caught sweating
         in the shadow
       of nights
unlightened

there is
  a sweet chime of
trees and the brush
of wings
       in the cradled peace
  of forests

they drift out
your name

           and mine

the rifts
         and rents
        of impossibilities

washed away like the
       chase of servals and leopards
after the hunts

I am the wild
      you wake to

yet lose in the lost
dream
        and how I know
the taste of your
       water-streams
the sight of your
               fresh-run trails

I know them as the
        whole of a harvested world

Come to me
          and yield the grains
        to bounty

you
     and I

delivered
        as the lamb and lion
caught in the blink
        of a sparrow’s eye
the touch of the wind
         of a moth’s flight


© Copyright 2000 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
INclan
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1 posted 03-26-2000 07:26 AM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

OUTSTANDING free verse!

Rave on!

Rave on!

INclan
Moonshine
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2 posted 03-26-2000 07:59 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Wow Severn,

This is truly lovely! I've read a few of your pieces lately and there is a trend here.......excellence! Teach me.......lol Well done.

Moonshine.

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Poet deVine
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3 posted 03-26-2000 08:22 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Wow. I'm at a loss for words. I love the form, the imagery...the whole thing! Very good!  
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 03-26-2000 09:43 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kamla~
Exquisite !

'you
  and I

delivered
  as the lamb and lion
caught in the blink
  of a sparrow’s eye
the touch of the wind
   of a moth’s flight

Simply exquisite !
~*Marge*~


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David2
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5 posted 03-26-2000 09:52 AM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

Free verse is not something I usually enjoy but the way your words complimented one another was beautiful. Nice ride!
      David2
Panthers Chrysalis
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6 posted 03-26-2000 02:01 PM       View Profile for Panthers Chrysalis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Panthers Chrysalis

Lost on the breeze of your talents! Simply Marvelous!!!  
Janet Marie
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7 posted 03-26-2000 03:45 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Severn,
this is EXCELLENT...the words float and the presentation and imagery were perfect, very nice!!!!!!!!!
take care, jm

 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman

Dark Angel
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8 posted 03-26-2000 04:04 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Sweet butterfly, you've done it again!!! This is Excellent my dear, the imagery is fantastic and well its beautiful as your poetry always is. Well Done!!   *hugs*

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Nan
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9 posted 03-26-2000 05:16 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I do love your poetic ambience.... Very nice, Severn..
Michael
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10 posted 03-26-2000 07:21 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

"I am the wild you wake to"

Wow, what a line.  Awesome poem, Severn.  Such beautiful flow of emotion.  I lack aprropriate compliment for you.


Michael
Martie
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11 posted 03-26-2000 09:28 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Oh my gosh, and wow!  I have no words really for the wonder of you poetic talent Kamla...you are ....you just are!
Corinne
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12 posted 03-27-2000 01:40 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

That is one awesome poem, my friend!

Corinne
Nicole
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13 posted 03-27-2000 03:01 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

K - Your poetry is a breath of fresh air.  Wonderful to see you posting, & please keep it up.

N  
Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 03-27-2000 09:52 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos




                      A MASTERPIECE

  
                           liz
hoot_owl_rn
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15 posted 03-27-2000 11:12 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I sit here at a loss for words....wonderful!!
Elizabeth Santos
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16 posted 03-27-2000 05:57 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Don't you think a Poem of this caliber should be sent back for another look?
YES!
Liz
Shelley
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17 posted 03-27-2000 06:20 PM       View Profile for Shelley   Email Shelley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shelley

I too agree that this is excellent!

I love the feeling it leaves me with!

Beautiful, wonderful, stimulating and excelent job!!
Meadowmuse
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18 posted 03-27-2000 06:30 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Magnificent. Like Michael, I was especially moved by ~


"I am the wild
      you wake to"

Such lovely, lovely writing. Thank you!

~ Claire
Danny Holloway
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19 posted 03-27-2000 06:38 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

What can I add that has not been said?
very nice poetry.  A masterful work.
Severn
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20 posted 03-28-2000 01:35 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

INclan - such a mighty compliment deserves a mighty thankyou!!!

Moonshine - Soon you and Maree and I can sit around and talk poetry - won't that just be cool?! Thanks hon!

PdV - thankye thankye thankye!!!  

Marge(y) - I am glad you liked this, ray of sunshine.  

David - I can truly relate - I feel that way about rhyming verse!!! I can't quite click with it...but every now and then one comes along that just reaches me deeply. I'm honoured to have written a freeverse poem that you responded to. Thanks.

P C - glad you breezed through! Thanks.

jm - thanks sweetie - very much...such lovely words you gave me.

Ss - let's see....it's 2.5 weeks now! I can't wait... here I come Sydney...thanks always for your support...

Nan - poetic ambience? Wow - cool!!! Thanks Nan!

Michael...That is a lovely lovely thing to say and I deeply appreciate it.

Martie - then may I suggest we stick to the one oxygen tent then?? LOL - I have an idea - let's do a collaboration one day.

Corinne - thanks hon - hey, I keep meaning to write - I promise I will...

Nic - My fellow piscean...(and aren't we just the best...*g*) thankyou.

Lizzy - thankyou dear for that mammoth compliment. Your faithful support is a treasure to me.

Ruthy - thankyou my friend. Hugs

Lizzy again -  

Shelley - that is such a range of effects and wow! Thanks!!!

Claire - ThankYOU for reading and liking!

Danny - hehe. It can get like that! Thankyou so much...


K



Poertree
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21 posted 03-28-2000 07:52 AM       View Profile for Poertree   Email Poertree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poertree

See ... this is what happens when you don't keep those claws in as I told you to .......
Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr this is too too wild Lady K

Later, my favourite feline    

SP
Severn
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22 posted 03-28-2000 07:37 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Hehe...grrrrrrrr back from a certain furry marsupial...NOT!

Thanks sweet Sir P

Lady K
Parker
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Posts 3135
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23 posted 03-28-2000 07:57 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Severn, this just flowed right over me, do it again.

Parker
CherylLynnMckee
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24 posted 03-28-2000 08:04 PM       View Profile for CherylLynnMckee   Email CherylLynnMckee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CherylLynnMckee

Wonderful..lovely..your very talented.

 
 
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