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The Mountain........................#1

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Balladeer
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The mountain stood within my sight
With jagged peaks that reached so high
They hid the twinkling stars at night
Embedded in the summer sky.

And, high upon the mountain's face
Clear waterfalls cascaded down
The side until they reached the base
To water fruit trees in the ground.

So held in awe, so struck was I
By this stone monument I spied
I bid my hill a fond farewell
And journeyed to the mountain's side.

But, as I stood there at the base,
The mountain did not seem so high.
It's trees were barren, void of fruit
And water falls ran dry.

Then, as I stared into the night
Across the lonesome valley floor,
A mountain stood within my sight...
The hill I'd known before.

Now, sitting on that valley floor,
I am forced to pay the cost
For the hill that I thought mountainous
And the mountain that I lost.

© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-26-2000 01:35 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

This is wonderful Balladeer, really enjoyed it, thanks  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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2 posted 03-26-2000 02:35 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Pally-O, this is just great!

Wow - this is a gentle, reflective side of you and it's wonderfully done...

'Then, as I stared into the night
Across the lonesome valley floor,
A mountain stood within my sight...
The hill I'd known before.'

That verse is my favourite...

Good stuff 'deer!

K



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life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
Nan
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I'm sending you back into your archives more often - Bring on the good'ns, Deer...
David2
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4 posted 03-26-2000 10:02 AM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

This last stanza was excellent!

Now, sitting on that valley floor,
I am forced to pay the cost
For the hill that I thought mountainous
And the mountain that I lost.

I loved it!
    David2


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5 posted 03-26-2000 10:44 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Sir Balladeer, you are amazing!
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6 posted 03-26-2000 10:48 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

A lyrical lesson! This is wonderful..  
Corinne
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7 posted 03-26-2000 11:51 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Damn, ain't that just the way life is, too!

You always tell it so very well, sir.

Corinne
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8 posted 03-26-2000 11:55 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I don't remember which of your poems I read first... I just remember the awe that started creeping into my consciousness as I read them... thanks for the repeat!
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I remember the impact this had on me when I first read it......it still does! Very well done, Balladeer!

Denise
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10 posted 03-26-2000 04:34 PM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Balladeer,
     Absolutely marvelous.  And so true!  Your sentiment could not be expressed more beautifully!
    Terry


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Sir Balladeer...I remember this one well and it is as lovely now as 'twas the first time I read it  
WhtDove
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12 posted 03-27-2000 09:31 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I remember this one too! Just as good this time around!  
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13 posted 03-27-2000 09:56 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Balladeer~
What a wonderful thought.
Back and forth from mountain to hill ...
sort of reminds me of
'the grass is always greener' adage.

Simply thought-provoking.
You are truly gifted, my friend.
~*Marge*~





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Butterflies_dont_cry
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Amazingly done!!  I had two feelings from this, the first being as Marge said the "grass is always greener" effect and the second being that when we first give thought to climbing the "mountain" in our life we may find that it wasn't such a mountain after all.  Take care and live well, thank you for sharing your work  
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15 posted 03-27-2000 11:32 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

What a wonderful place we have here....and with such kind people. Thank you all very much.......
Meadowmuse
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Balladeer, what a tale of perception...you are, indeed, a master Teller and I must thank you, in earnest, for the gifting.

~ Claire
 
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