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Joannak
Member

since 2000-03-11

Posts 121
Indiana, USA

0 posted 2000-03-25 11:39 PM

Rain, softly falling
Memories, passions alive
Thinking of you now.

In the dark of morn
Dripping music from the trees
I whisper your name.

Knowing you are near,
Listening to the rain song
Do you think of me?

jk

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2000-03-26 02:44 AM

Joanna~
This is flawlessly lovely.
Tying the three into the poem
works beautifully for me.
I like !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

INclan
Senior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

2 posted 2000-03-26 07:03 AM

Joannak,

I am speachless. My work pales by comparison. Teach me....I beg you!

INclan

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-03-26 02:58 PM

Simply beautiful, Joannak!

Denise

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2000-03-26 03:52 PM

"Thinking of your now...I whisper your name..Do you think of me?" Yes..I do. Very romantic writing. James

mariee66
Senior Member

since 2000-01-30

Posts 596
Recess, OfYourMind

5 posted 2000-03-26 07:23 PM

Wow~
This is oozing with emotion~
I LOVE IT! ~
Marie~

"Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard

Joannak
Member

since 2000-03-11

Posts 121
Indiana, USA

6 posted 2000-03-26 08:32 PM

Thank you all for your comments.

Marge, I admire your writing so much, it honors me to have you read my work.

INclan, I have no teaching credentials, but maybe we could collaborate sometime?

Thank you, Denise. I love your work as well, and look forward to reading more.

James, I had a romantic inspiration for this piece, I hope he will read and know it is for him...

Marie, thanks for the comments, I do have a very emotional tie with this person, he brings out the best in me.

Joanna

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

7 posted 2000-03-27 10:32 AM

Very lovely and very well done

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