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Christopher
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0 posted 03-25-2000 03:50 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Christopher

This


reached out for something more
                 -it's you-
pulled out something less
                -it's me-
when will it be
where will we go-
           to get away from...
                        this
I cried all night,
                not in love
   where were you,
              -I needed,
                      not you
                      not me
             -just...
                    this


.



 "I don't claim to be a wise man, a poet or a saint.
Just another man who's searching for a better way.
But my heart beats loud as thunder for the things that I believe.
Sometimes I want to run for cover, sometimes I want to scream."
Jon Bon Jovi
© Copyright 2000 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 03-25-2000 03:53 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is one of your best. To the point and full of meaning and feeling! Incredible, my friend.  
wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)


2 posted 03-25-2000 03:53 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

you needed a cry is that what you are saying yuh i do too i likes gettin it all out...nice poem
Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 03-25-2000 04:45 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Applauding one of my few "Favorite Poets"
Get tired of the word perfection for your poetry, but that's the best it can get.
So Christopher, this is perfect
Liz
tracie66
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4 posted 03-25-2000 05:14 PM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Christopher
~This~
was great and I enjoyed reading every last word.
Tracie


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks
Nicole
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5 posted 03-25-2000 05:39 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

I *love* the formatting!  Please, experiment with some more.

"when will it be
where will we go"

For some reason those two lines just reached out an grabbed me.  Excellent work, as always m'friend.
Michael
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6 posted 03-25-2000 07:26 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

I ask for this,
you give me that,
Not that I don't like this.

But this could be that
And that should be this
What is so wrong with that?

Nothing more, nothing less,
Reaching sucks, I must confess.
I cannot give you what you need, Chris,
Sadly all I can give is - this!


Sorry bud....just burning brain cells here.

I find myself needing that "this" thing a lot myself these days.  Great little poem.


Michael
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7 posted 03-25-2000 09:38 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Chris, I too find myself with nothing new to describe you work. Brilliance, excellence, rub some off over here would ya  
Marge Tindal
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8 posted 03-25-2000 10:14 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Christopher~
Perfection formatted to the letter ..
Nobody does 'THIS' better.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

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In the space between moments


9 posted 03-25-2000 10:59 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Remarkable, Christopher.  The format really drew me in, as did your words.  Exellent.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~


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10 posted 03-26-2000 12:10 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Chris, writing from the heart is always beautiful, and your gentle verse is just that. I wish I knew better where the "this" is kept, because I've not known any for so long...I would be sure to procure enough for both of us. Thank you, for all your "This's."

~ Claire
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11 posted 03-26-2000 02:32 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

How wistfully mournful - done to the tee my friend. Yep - to the tee, can't find any flaws here...interesting format, I really like it.

I guess the word that sums the poem up for me is: gentle.

Well done.

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
devina
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12 posted 03-26-2000 03:01 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I've never seen so much emotion dripping from a poem Chris...me thinks you're turning soft!!!G* This is what feeling is...

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Nan
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13 posted 03-26-2000 10:07 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

You've written "This" poem beautifully, Chris..
Skyfyre
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14 posted 03-26-2000 09:35 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

I don't need to tell you again that I envy you your talent for free verse, but I will.  It is amazing what a talented poet can say in something so apparently uncomplicated as "This."  Well done.  

--Me


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

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15 posted 03-26-2000 10:47 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Beautiful, Christopher!  The emotion IS the drama, here...a little sad, but lovely, lovely...
Butterflies_dont_cry
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16 posted 03-27-2000 06:41 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

This was amazing, looking at the self first for change and for what is needed rather than someone else is a relvelation to finding happiness and contenment.  Few words profound messages.  Thank you for sharing.
hoot_owl_rn
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17 posted 03-27-2000 11:06 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

It doesn't get any better than THIS! wonderful poem Chris  
Christopher
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18 posted 03-28-2000 12:03 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Thank you all my friends. Sorry it's taken me a while to respond. I hurt my back very badly and am pretty much incapacitated. (You kow it's bad if I can't be on the computer.) Take care all, miss you much!


Sharon ~ Wow! You're saying something nice about one of my poems! Thank you!!!  

Walt ~ Right on the head bud! Nailed it you did, yuh!

Liz ~ " - Applauding one of my few "Favorite Poets" - " OMG!!! This right here is the moost flattering statement I've ever received. I don't know how to respond. Thank you!!!

tracie66 ~ Thank you kindly!!!

Nic ~ As with Michael, I find we often walk the same paths. Thank you for your understanding my friend!  

Mike ~ Thanks for that, makes this easier!  

Becca ~ I ascribe all of those to you as well, you've no need to have any rubbed off on you!

Marge ~ As I said with Liz, a compliment like that has me speechless! Thank you my friend! You've lifted the veil and shone through like a ray of light from the sun!

Krista ~ Thank you for stopping by... your words mean much!

Claire ~ Each time you breeze in, you leave a fresh smile on my face! Thank you, and if you do find it, please share!!!  

Kamla ~ "can't find any flaws here" What??? Are you ok? Did you fall and hit your head?? Thank you my friend, you know your opinion is highly valued by me!

Devina ~ "Soft?" Are you daft? It's just a pose, I'm tricking everyone into thinking that, so Shhhh!

Nan ~ Thank you for dropping in on "this!"

Kess ~ And still amazed am I that I can awe you! Thank you for shining in here too!

Serenity ~ Thank you for the comment. It IS sad, but sometimes life is to!

BDC ~ You understand, for that I am thankful!!

Ruth ~ Welcome my friend, thank you for your comments.


 
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