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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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reached out for something more -it's you- pulled out something less -it's me- when will it be where will we go- to get away from... this I cried all night, not in love where were you, -I needed, not you not me -just... this . "I don't claim to be a wise man, a poet or a saint. Just another man who's searching for a better way. But my heart beats loud as thunder for the things that I believe. Sometimes I want to run for cover, sometimes I want to scream." Jon Bon Jovi |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is one of your best. To the point and full of meaning and feeling! Incredible, my friend.  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
you needed a cry is that what you are saying yuh i do too i likes gettin it all out...nice poem |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Applauding one of my few "Favorite Poets" Get tired of the word perfection for your poetry, but that's the best it can get. So Christopher, this is perfect Liz |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Christopher ~This~ was great and I enjoyed reading every last word. Tracie Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I *love* the formatting! Please, experiment with some more. "when will it be where will we go" For some reason those two lines just reached out an grabbed me. Excellent work, as always m'friend. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I ask for this, you give me that, Not that I don't like this. But this could be that And that should be this What is so wrong with that? Nothing more, nothing less, Reaching sucks, I must confess. I cannot give you what you need, Chris, Sadly all I can give is - this! Sorry bud....just burning brain cells here. I find myself needing that "this" thing a lot myself these days. Great little poem. Michael |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Chris, I too find myself with nothing new to describe you work. Brilliance, excellence, rub some off over here would ya  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Christopher~ Perfection formatted to the letter .. Nobody does 'THIS' better. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Remarkable, Christopher. The format really drew me in, as did your words. Exellent. *Krista Knutson* ~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Chris, writing from the heart is always beautiful, and your gentle verse is just that. I wish I knew better where the "this" is kept, because I've not known any for so long...I would be sure to procure enough for both of us. Thank you, for all your "This's." ~ Claire |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
How wistfully mournful - done to the tee my friend. Yep - to the tee, can't find any flaws here...interesting format, I really like it. I guess the word that sums the poem up for me is: gentle. Well done. K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I've never seen so much emotion dripping from a poem Chris...me thinks you're turning soft!!!G* This is what feeling is... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You've written "This" poem beautifully, Chris..  |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
I don't need to tell you again that I envy you your talent for free verse, but I will. It is amazing what a talented poet can say in something so apparently uncomplicated as "This." Well done. --Me Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Beautiful, Christopher! The emotion IS the drama, here...a little sad, but lovely, lovely... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This was amazing, looking at the self first for change and for what is needed rather than someone else is a relvelation to finding happiness and contenment. Few words profound messages. Thank you for sharing. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
It doesn't get any better than THIS! wonderful poem Chris |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Thank you all my friends. Sorry it's taken me a while to respond. I hurt my back very badly and am pretty much incapacitated. (You kow it's bad if I can't be on the computer.) Take care all, miss you much! Sharon ~ Wow! You're saying something nice about one of my poems! Thank you!!! Walt ~ Right on the head bud! Nailed it you did, yuh! Liz ~ " - Applauding one of my few "Favorite Poets" - " OMG!!! This right here is the moost flattering statement I've ever received. I don't know how to respond. Thank you!!! tracie66 ~ Thank you kindly!!! Nic ~ As with Michael, I find we often walk the same paths. Thank you for your understanding my friend! Mike ~ Thanks for that, makes this easier!  Becca ~ I ascribe all of those to you as well, you've no need to have any rubbed off on you! Marge ~ As I said with Liz, a compliment like that has me speechless! Thank you my friend! You've lifted the veil and shone through like a ray of light from the sun! Krista ~ Thank you for stopping by... your words mean much! Claire ~ Each time you breeze in, you leave a fresh smile on my face! Thank you, and if you do find it, please share!!! Kamla ~ "can't find any flaws here" What??? Are you ok? Did you fall and hit your head?? Thank you my friend, you know your opinion is highly valued by me! Devina ~ "Soft?" Are you daft? It's just a pose, I'm tricking everyone into thinking that, so Shhhh! Nan ~ Thank you for dropping in on "this!" Kess ~ And still amazed am I that I can awe you! Thank you for shining in here too! Serenity ~ Thank you for the comment. It IS sad, but sometimes life is to! BDC ~ You understand, for that I am thankful!! Ruth ~ Welcome my friend, thank you for your comments. |
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