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serenity blaze
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0 posted 03-24-2000 10:57 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

It is all there,
simplicity.
There is no door.
There is no key.
I simply cleared my thoughts
of me,
and there I stood,
smiling back at me.

So simple, now, I'm not surprised
that every thing I've known is lies.
Cursing as the sun goes down,
and yet again, when it did rise.

I shake my head in disbelief.
Remember panic turned to despair.
There never was a lack of air.
Gasping, I forgot to breathe.

© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 03-24-2000 11:02 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

So simple, now, I'm not surprised
that every thing I've known is lies.
Cursing as the sun goes down,
and yet again, when it did rise
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damn...this poem made me forget to breath while i was reading it...exceptional poem serenity...truly...so much emotion said in a few perfect words...
take care, jm
Balladeer
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2 posted 03-24-2000 11:09 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

There is certainly an awful lot that can be read into these lines......to me, a mark of an excellent poem. Glad you're not bummed out any more  
devina
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3 posted 03-24-2000 11:18 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I'm glad to see that you've found the beautiful person that I've ALWAYS known was there!!!! Keep your head up sis...good things come to those who wait!!

love you!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

VampDude
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4 posted 03-24-2000 11:20 PM       View Profile for VampDude   Email VampDude   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit VampDude's Home Page   View IP for VampDude

Wow, great poem serenity, I love it - I look forward to more of your work.
Rex Allen McCoy
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5 posted 03-25-2000 12:51 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

You have a remarkable talent with words serenity ... I wrote a poem called 'Labyrinth' about a month ago ... I think only one person replied to it though
Yours is much better

Rex}>{{{{o>
Marge Tindal
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6 posted 03-25-2000 12:56 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Serenity, little Serenity~
This is sooooo good.
Filled with good thoughts of YOU !
Glad for you that you've caught your breath.
Beautifully done.
Love you
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 03-25-2000 02:07 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh this says so much more than is on the surface...nicely written  
Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 03-25-2000 10:40 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Excellent poem
It's great when we finally see the truth.
Liz
Michael
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9 posted 03-25-2000 10:55 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

This is a monster of a poem.  The last two lines are "classic"...  Wonderful job, serenity.


Michael
Martie
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10 posted 03-25-2000 04:09 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Serenity--fantastic poem...perfection in words.
serenity blaze
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11 posted 03-26-2000 09:33 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Thank you to all of the very special people of the forum...
mom...you give the best advice!

devina...a sweet sister...

Michael...master of words!

Martie the "painter" and hoot, warms my heart,and Balladeer--
with a man as clever as yourself, who needs
foreplay?

Janet Marie--right bact atcha!

Rex Allen--my buddy!

E. Santos--I thank you!

And just a note to clear things up a bit--the things I've written about are not lies--
they just didn't happen yesterday.
So thank you for tolerating my dusting off the cobwebs!  Catharsis, to say the least!
 
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