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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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It is all there, simplicity. There is no door. There is no key. I simply cleared my thoughts of me, and there I stood, smiling back at me. So simple, now, I'm not surprised that every thing I've known is lies. Cursing as the sun goes down, and yet again, when it did rise. I shake my head in disbelief. Remember panic turned to despair. There never was a lack of air. Gasping, I forgot to breathe. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So simple, now, I'm not surprised that every thing I've known is lies. Cursing as the sun goes down, and yet again, when it did rise ------------- damn...this poem made me forget to breath while i was reading it...exceptional poem serenity...truly...so much emotion said in a few perfect words... take care, jm |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
There is certainly an awful lot that can be read into these lines......to me, a mark of an excellent poem. Glad you're not bummed out any more  |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I'm glad to see that you've found the beautiful person that I've ALWAYS known was there!!!! Keep your head up sis...good things come to those who wait!!  love you!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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VampDude Junior Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 21Canada |
Wow, great poem serenity, I love it - I look forward to more of your work. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
You have a remarkable talent with words serenity ... I wrote a poem called 'Labyrinth' about a month ago ... I think only one person replied to it though Yours is much better Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity, little Serenity~ This is sooooo good. Filled with good thoughts of YOU ! Glad for you that you've caught your breath. Beautifully done. Love you ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh this says so much more than is on the surface...nicely written |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Excellent poem It's great when we finally see the truth. Liz |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
This is a monster of a poem. The last two lines are "classic"... Wonderful job, serenity. Michael |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--fantastic poem...perfection in words. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you to all of the very special people of the forum... mom...you give the best advice! devina...a sweet sister... Michael...master of words! Martie the "painter" and hoot, warms my heart,and Balladeer-- with a man as clever as yourself, who needs foreplay? Janet Marie--right bact atcha! Rex Allen--my buddy! E. Santos--I thank you! And just a note to clear things up a bit--the things I've written about are not lies-- they just didn't happen yesterday. So thank you for tolerating my dusting off the cobwebs! Catharsis, to say the least! |
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