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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 2000-03-24 08:55 PM


The Ice Queen Dances

The ice queen dances
tonight, alone,
while men watch
on to see her
perform her show.
Eyes of blue look
right through them
as she struts her stuff
for all to see.

Twirling, she moves,
a picture of beauty and grace.
The world becomes her
stage, but her star burned
out long ago.

The ice queen dances
tonight, the coldness in her
heart put there
by those who now wish
only to possess her.
Her glass slippers fail
to carry the weight
she has come to bare
and they shatter
like the illusions
she once had.

Frozen smile
upon her face,
she twists
the truth to fit her
expectations, lying
only to herself.

The ice queen dances
tonight, alone,
as you watch on.
She performs for you.
Cold, she has become.
Watch how she moves
...just don’t touch
or you'll get burned.


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 There are only two ages of people...living and dead and you all look about the right age to me  



[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 03-24-2000).]

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wayoutwalt
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1 posted 2000-03-24 08:57 PM


ouch yuh its relief to know you women folk can call each other such names makes muh pms poem not scare me so much yuh...ouch gettin burned by this lady ouch ouch gf'lkfhg'
Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-03-24 09:00 PM


Wow! Superb! I get a really clear visual of this woman..and get a chill thinking about it! Very good!  
Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2000-03-24 09:02 PM


Hoot, Yes ice can burn, but its wonderful when you warm it. Excellent poem. *L*
Denise
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4 posted 2000-03-24 09:08 PM


Very powerful poem, Ruth. Very strong. Well written!

Denise

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5 posted 2000-03-24 09:21 PM


Oh my, Hoot~

I just grabbed a sweater ...
felt like the temperature dropped
a degree or two.

Wonderful image jumps to mind ...
you are HOT !  er .. COLD  er ...
definitely not TEPID !

This is just wonderful.
This is visually powerful.

LOL at Walt !
~*Marge*~



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hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 2000-03-25 01:47 AM


Walt, PDV, Seymore, Marge and Denise...thank you all so much for reading  
kitkat
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7 posted 2000-03-25 01:57 AM


This was an excellent piece. I have known some women how danced professionally. You described their emotions to a tee.
Dark Angel
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8 posted 2000-03-25 06:02 AM


This is wonderful Ruth!!  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Tess
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9 posted 2000-03-25 06:24 AM


this poem doesnt make me feel cold..it makes me feel the sad disillusionment of a women trapped into doing something....something that obviously she doesnt really enjoy..but for whatever reasons she feels she has to do
she twists
the truth to fit her
expectations,
lying
only to herself.

something that l guess she tries to justify to herself...and probably deep down realizes the lies..and her ice cold outer is her way of dealing with it..of maintaining herself


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bodies."
-Aristotle


INclan
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10 posted 2000-03-25 07:10 AM


Wonderful, Ruth.  It is difficult for me to respond...having some experience with ICE. I think I could cope better if ICE were cold (or hot).  No, I have seen an ICE queen, and her eyes speak the droning monotone of indiference. Yes, you poem evoked a VERY strong emotional response in me......well done!

INclan

Janet Marie
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11 posted 2000-03-25 09:51 AM


Hoot, I had to read this one just cause of the title alone...this is my nickname...that and frigidare woman  
have you been peeking again..lol
excellent poem , perfect visuals...
may I have this dance...*S*
take care, jm

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Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
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12 posted 2000-03-25 11:22 AM


Ruth, this is an exceptional poem!  Wonderful lines all, super ending, well-lit story...bravo!
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13 posted 2000-03-25 01:03 PM


I just had to read your poem when I came across the title! .... Whenever my friend and I go out dancing- she refers to me as the "Ice Princess"....   I was not disappointed by your spectacular poem- and felt as though I was on the dance floor once again!  I can't wait to read more of your work!

hoot_owl_rn
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14 posted 2000-03-25 05:08 PM


I just want to say thanks to everyone for reading and  replying. Although it can be seen as an exotic dancer it is really about a woman scorned time and time again to the point where she has given up on love. The coldness that men shun was put there by the very same. She lies to herself when she thinks she needs no one. She dances (lives life) with no zest.
tracie66
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15 posted 2000-03-25 05:37 PM


This brings the picture to your mind as you're reading and you have captured it well Hoot.
Great poem


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

Jamie Dawg
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16 posted 2000-03-25 07:19 PM


sooo fine...I can really relate, and the rhythm was smooth and sinuous. Similar to Stevie Smith's not waving but drowning. Where do you get your inspiration?

Peace. From a brother to a sister.

Windrider Silverbreeze
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17 posted 2000-03-25 08:13 PM




(In responce to Ice Queen Dancer)

They call me unfeeling,
They call me 'cold fish'.
They say 'she is heartless,
And call me a b****.
They say I feel nothing,
I'm dead to the world.

If I'm so dead I wonder,
Why does it hurt.

(I know the Ice Queen facade only too well.. very well written)


Meadowmuse
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18 posted 2000-03-25 09:27 PM


Wonderfully metaphorical, Ruth. You're such a creative writer.  

~ Claire

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19 posted 2000-03-25 09:33 PM


Whew! Almost missed this one. It is superb writing, Ruth. I knew immediately it wasn't about dancing, of course. It is a very powerful poem.


So why didn't you tell me you know my ex-wife?  

WhtDove
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20 posted 2000-03-25 09:35 PM


Ruth this was powerful! I love it!
Nan
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21 posted 2000-03-26 07:16 AM


This is quite an effective extended metaphor here... Of course, you know that I know - that the Ice Queen has a very warm inner heart..  


[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 03-26-2000).]

hoot_owl_rn
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22 posted 2000-03-26 08:46 PM


Thank you everyone for your comments on this one.

Nan...I just want to say that means a lot to me  

Wildrider....great reply , thank you. I do know exactly where you are coming from on that  

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23 posted 2000-03-26 08:55 PM


Wow... this is a great poem, and so true, for preformers onstage and in life. Keep up the good work!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

Rex Allen McCoy
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24 posted 2000-03-26 10:06 PM


I've met a few people like this before ... and at first it is difficult to continue to try to be friendly ... but perseverance pays off because they have turned out to be amoung my very best of friends

beautifully written
Rex}>{{{{o>

hoot_owl_rn
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25 posted 2000-03-27 10:56 AM


Love Bug and Rex...thank you both  
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