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Corinne
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state of confusion

0 posted 2000-03-24 12:20 PM


There are more reasons to fail than prevail,
letting go, yielding to recklessness,
it will wreck you, this hopelessness,
that alluring foul addiction,
this dour inner prediction.

Pace and roam airless rooms called home,
the mirror reflects milky eyes,
into the face of suicide,
are you to be a dupe in death,
is this to be your chosen path?

Then, at last, in the most mundane of tasks,
in the face of a stranger perhaps,
something inside finally snaps,
some kind gesture, a knowing gaze,
thoughts that occur do amaze.

You don’t have to submit to it,
there is serenity in winning,
maybe a new beginning,
it was always there before you,
outside, the earth waits for you.

Out there, it all surrounds,
the beauty of peace astounds,
nature in its revelry,
evidence of the Deity.

Love.

© C.M. Bailey


© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Rex Allen McCoy
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1 posted 2000-03-24 12:29 PM


Beautifully written ... and such good advice
I shudder to think of anyone in such a state as to be contemplating suicide

Rex}<{{{{o>

Tess
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2 posted 2000-03-24 12:41 PM


you capture the hopelessness well...words like milky give that fading away feel too..but then the change and the realization that life still has something to offer

Great poem!

 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle


Meadowmuse
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3 posted 2000-03-24 01:16 PM


Corinne, you've worked a powerful and uplifting message into this piece... just wonderful.

~ Claire

Parker
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4 posted 2000-03-24 01:18 PM


Corinne, your poetry is so varied, and reaching another gem.

Parker

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-03-24 01:50 PM


Corinne~
You put forth such versatility ..
it's a sheer pleasure to read and then
to re-read !  
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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RAM
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6 posted 2000-03-24 03:06 PM


darkness -- reaching for light
a wonderful weave, Corinne.  Thanks for posting this one.

RAM

hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 2000-03-24 03:15 PM


and the choice is indeed all ours...we can be miserable, or we can do something and be happy  
Corinne
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state of confusion
8 posted 2000-03-24 07:00 PM


Thank you, Rex, yes, but it crosses all of minds at some point (or so I've been told), even if only for the briefest moment.

Thank  you, Tess and Meadowmuse, seems I just don't like bad endings, because it occurred to me that this poem could have ended either way.

Marge and Parker, thank you. Trying to stretch a bit, anyway.

and RAM, a special thank you.

Hoot, thank you!

Corinne

Denise
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9 posted 2000-03-24 08:21 PM


Wonderful writing, wonderful message, Corinne!

Denise

Corinne
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state of confusion
10 posted 2000-03-25 10:00 AM


Thanks, Denise!

Corinne

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