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Cease To Be

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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 03-24-2000 10:02 AM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PoeticKnight

My hope is plain and that is to explain
While pausing this one time only
That my existence is uncertain which causes hurting
If not allowed to be nothing if not me,
And knowing that is what makes me,
I will cease to be

Asked to use my eyes and to realize
How could I, blind, unable to see?
Truth sometimes lagging, and a voice gently nagging,
If not given the freedom to be free,
And in that unfettered state, not really free,
Then I will cease to be

My profession begs for candid confession
Over this strained and sorrow plea
Going without confessing begins my regressing,
Lowers myself onto bended knee
Falling down upon bended knee,
Ceasing to be

Evidence of this verbal extravagance
Iíll try to state so eloquently
In my giving, hope to find one forgiving,
And show them the real me,
To show them the real me,
Before I cease to be

© Copyright 2000 J.M. Landry - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 03-24-2000 10:21 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

My hope is plain and that is to explain
While pausing this one time only
That my existence is uncertain which causes hurting
If not allowed to be nothing if not me,
And knowing that is what makes me,
I will cease to be
Asked to use my eyes and to realize
How could I, blind, unable to see?
Truth sometimes lagging, and a voice gently nagging,
If not given the freedom to be free,
And in that unfettered state, not really free,
Then I will cease to be

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damn, I am sitting here awe struck by this one jer, seriously.
This is brilliant...all of it...the way your mind works and then this expression of those thoughts and emotions.
AMAZING depth in this.
cranking up the printer...
stalking you in awe...again...
your jm

 Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules
Do you care what is thought by others about you
If this day is all that is promised to you
Do you live for the present, the future the past...
tracy chapman

Tess
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since 03-22-2000
Posts 291
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2 posted 03-24-2000 10:43 AM       View Profile for Tess   Email Tess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tess's Home Page   View IP for Tess

I love the way the last line is repeated at the end of every (stanza verse hell l dont know much about the tech words to use..l just love poems!) but anyway I really think that brings home the sad? desperate? lonely? tone of the poem
Great work
Tess

 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle

hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 03-24-2000 03:24 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nice work Jerry  
Meadowmuse
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4 posted 03-24-2000 03:38 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

JML, this is so lyrical and ripened with the journey of reflection's path. We must all strive for the truth, though it can be a difficult bending of the road. I enjoyed reading this.

~ Claire  
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