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Solitary Tear (A Tanka response to Romantic Heart)

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INclan
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0 posted 03-24-2000 09:04 AM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for INclan


solitary tear
in falling dost thou hear me
wailing Autumn wind
by intoning Siren's song
I grieve thy passing moment

© Copyright 2000 KKunnen - All Rights Reserved
David2
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1 posted 03-24-2000 09:07 AM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

Very concise and touching.
    David2
INclan
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2 posted 03-24-2000 02:33 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Thank you, David2. I strive for simplicity.

INclan
Meadowmuse
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3 posted 03-24-2000 02:51 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

INClan, you've certainly wasted no words here...this is lovely, to be sure.

~ Claire

**don't know how I goofed on your name...so sorrry!!  

[This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 03-24-2000).]
hoot_owl_rn
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Inclan...this is perfect  
INclan
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5 posted 03-25-2000 06:59 AM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Thank you so much Meadowmuse. I understand about the name...people have done far worse. I take/took NO offence.

Ruth, from you, that is HIGH praise indeed. As a poet and person I respect and admire, your opinion carries great weight with me...thank you.

Best Regards,

INclan
christies heart
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INclan, The greatest things are often rooted in simplicity! Love the poem.

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


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Beautifully done, INclan! This is lovely!

Denise
Dennis L. White
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INclan, this is great, tanka is so beautiful and your is no exception! WELL DONE!
Dennis :^)
Martie
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9 posted 03-25-2000 12:46 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

A simple thing, said in just the right way, like this, has such impact.  Wonderfully done!
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Oh, INclan~
I am INclined to like it.
~*Marge*~


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INclan... Simple- yet so in-depth!  Nice!
INclan
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12 posted 03-25-2000 09:38 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

Thank you, Christy, dsnyder, Dennis, Martie, Marge and Panther....your encouragement is worth it's weight in gold! Welcome to Passions, Panthers Chrysalis. Since this was a response to "A Romantic Heart," I have been waiting for her response...I wait on.

INclan
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13 posted 04-09-2000 04:38 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

I hear thy voice,
As winds whisper it to thy ear,
do not grieve for I am here,
Never shall fall
a solitary tear,
Janet Marie
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Inclan this is PERFECT!
its beauty is in it sweet emotions,expressed
so simply, yet with so much emotional depth.
I've never tried a Tanka...this one makes me think I might like to, its excellent.
take care, jm


PS...glad you got the response you've been waiting for...its perfect too...worth the wait in my humble opinion  
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15 posted 04-09-2000 09:35 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Sometimes it is very pleasant just to see the lady disrobed, devoid of baubles and make-up, standing there in the natural beauty of pure simplicity....like your poetry. I admire your style.
lindak6
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so few words, so much meaning!  sweet  
mariee66
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I felt that solitary tear~
Beatifully written~

Marie~


 "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard


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18 posted 04-09-2000 07:10 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

IN,
At first I was worried that I'd lost the respect of a good poet. I can sleep now.

M.
Tenderheart
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INclan  Simple..beautiful..full of sensations...most enjoyable!
Thank you!
INclan
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Thank you, Romantic Heart.  I have been waiting for your response. It was worth the wait!

Thank you, Janet, Balladeer, Lindak6, Mariee66, bsquirrel, and Tenderheart. Good to see you solved the password problem, Tenderheart.

I am indebted to you all for setting a new response record for me.

INclan
kaile
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let me contribute towards your high record!  ")  

i think this one was unique and exceptional(i love the language here) but i don't understand what you mean by "siren's song"--can u e-mail me to tell me the answer?
thanx in advance  

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