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Alone Too Long

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David2
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Alone Too Long

As winds of turmoil in a tempest toss,
So too, my torments threaten to persist.
I grieve in agony my lover's loss,
And vainly strive this torture to resist.
Another empty night of broken dreams,
Obstructed love to shatter peaceful sleep,
This time alone becomes a shallow stream,
Of endless, painful, waking hours to keep.
But pain so rich is born of love sublime,
Why else would one lament so fervently?
To never love would be the greater crime,
And so I claim her heart most selfishly.

Thus suffering precedes serenity,
For love conceived in serendipity

© Copyright 2000 David William La Belle - All Rights Reserved
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***David2,
Yet again, a heartfelt poem, full of tangled emotion and .
I loved the lines:
  "But pain so rich is born of love sublime,
   Why else would one lament so fervently?"

Fantastic....  


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This time alone becomes a shallow stream,
Of endless, painful, waking hours to keep.
But pain so rich is born of love sublime,
Why else would one lament so fervently?
To never love would be the greater crime,
And so I claim her heart most selfishly.

Thus suffering precedes serenity,
For love conceived in serendipity
------------------

wow, David this is exceptional writing...
deep emotions very well expressed.
very nice,
take care, jm

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David:

Well written sonnet.  I enjoyed this.  Thanks.

Jim
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Yes, well written sonnet, David! I too especially love those lines :

'But pain so rich is born of love sublime,
Why else would one lament so fervently?'

Excellent writing, David!  

Denise
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hmmmmm
me thinks there's an echo in here!!
but what more can l say  

Excellent writing David!

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bodies."
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David,
     Never before have I seen such heartfelt words so beautifully brought forth from the soul to the paper.  This is what poetry is all about!   Excellent poem.  I can honestly say it is one of the best things I have ever read!



 
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David...me things you doest like the sonnets...and you most certainly do them justice. There's a number of journals that take sonnets only you know?   Hey, you'll find I'm persistant  
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David2~
So eloquently versed.
You've got a way with words, sir.
Wonderful way !
~*Marge*~


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David2,
Good words, good thoughts, good poem.
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David~
As winds of turmoil in a tempest toss,
So too, my torments threaten to persist.
I grieve in agony my lover's loss,
And vainly strive this torture to resist.

I am amazed by the use of words. Excellent!!

~Jen  


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David...your word play leaves me speechless...are you any relation to Shakespeare? Love these keep them coming!!!!
Great work


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Which alters when it alteration finds,
Or bends with the remover to remove.
O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare

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I reeeeeeeeeeeeally like this, Dave...

I love the couplet....
"Thus suffering precedes serenity,
For love conceived in serendipity"


You're talkin' my language here... Serendipity was my own maiden poetic venture.  It's not a sonnet, but it is iambic pentameter...    




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Very nicely written.  

~ Claire
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Summer's sweet wind's carress the turmoil'd state,
Tenderly soothing the hole ridden torments,
Life's sweet blossom will bloom anew,
Once resisting has stopped and pain has been given eternal release.
Peaceful dreams with hopes aplenty,
With the growing stream of paths yet unfound,
Yet pain is learned, to keep in ones mind,
To remember that love if right, can last for eternity.
To love again, is one's largest dream,
And so one gives their heart selflessly,


(A heart felt responce.  A lovely sonnet you've written that would capture the heart of any woman you dream.  Well done David.)

Franni
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This is a perfect sonnet and a perfect subject for a sonnet.  Shakespeare would applaud.  I struggle with sonnets.  You are a natural.  Your lines stay with me.

Franni
 
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