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Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 2000-03-24 07:35 AM


I'm Giving Up!!!

I've been riding horseback through this place
watching the beautiful scenery evolve naturally
meeting and greeting new faces along the way
a thrill that I have enjoyed yet now it's changed

Watching the beautifully scenery evolve naturally
enjoying every minute of creative hand made art
contributing my poetic creativity to the scenery
now the time has come I feel alone and very lost

Meeting and greeting new faces along the way
gave me such joy and peacefulness in my life
sad to think this horse won't ride here anymore
tears drip as I wonder why my name is shunned

A thrill that I have enjoyed yet now has changed
seems my abilities to create are not the same
so I'm giving up joy and peace of all the months
I've been riding horseback through this place.

© Copyright 2000 RiaL - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 2000-03-24 07:50 AM


Gloria - Whatchu talkin'bout??... You know the rule of horseback riding, though - Right?? When you fall off - You have to get right back up and climb on for another ride... It's the rule..
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-03-24 08:16 AM


Give that horse some oats! Saddle up, missy and ride like the wind...right back here.  
mete out
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england
3 posted 2000-03-24 10:28 AM


***Lost Dreamer,
I know it's hard to pick yourself up...but please, do it.

You are loved and greatly admired here.

Do what ever makes you happy, and the way your 'tears drip' I think you are better off here honey.    


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
4 posted 2000-03-24 10:33 AM


Sorry the horse threw me to the ground
I came to and so blinded were my eyes
seeing some kind of delusional thoughts
sent me riding away lost into the sunset

I came to and so blinded were my eyes
trying to send me off somewhere alone
so far from the people here at Passions
that give me a home to share with them

Seeing some kind of delusional thoughts
I followed unknowing the path they had set
my horse he followed no argument from him
as I became lost in a furying fight of illusion

Sent me riding away lost into the sunset
slowly my mind was refreshing the truth
that where I belong is where it all began
sorry the horse threw me to the ground

mete out
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england
5 posted 2000-03-24 10:39 AM


Well Done!


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


WhtDove
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6 posted 2000-03-24 10:39 AM


Gloria NEVER give up! That's too easy, and you're loved here. It's a beautiful gift you share with us in your writing, so you keep sharing it.  I can relate to how you're feeling, but you hang in there!  New faces, new crowd, getting busy in here it is...but this is home where we know each other, and there's no place like it.  

How could we possibly do without your caring, loving nature around here?  Ride the tide and conquer!

Denise
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7 posted 2000-03-24 12:00 PM


Don't you give up, that's not the way to go
Climb back each time into that saddle high
Hold high your head and take breaths deep and slow
And write those poems that can make me *sigh*.

You have a talent that's beyond compare
You write with such an eloquence and grace
You have so many friends here that do care
Who'd miss you so if you left Passions Place.

DON'T YOU EVEN THINK ABOUT LEAVING, GLORIA!!!


hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 2000-03-24 03:03 PM


Gloria..you know what you do when you get thrown off right? Get right back up on it and try again. Happy Trails to you my friend, but make sure they're only around passions  
Meadowmuse
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9 posted 2000-03-24 03:28 PM


G~L~O~R~I~A     Oh won't you stayyyy just a little bit longer...please, please, please say you will~~  I love reading your work. I haven't a clue about the personal matters you've referred to, and frankly it's none of my business, but I do know that sharing poetry is good for the soul. I hope you stay, dear poet. (((you)))

~ Claire

doreen peri
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10 posted 2000-03-24 03:38 PM


Justin Kace you didn't know, your writing is a wonderful expression of who you are! Wha' happened? You been hanging out in the 'stute too long, I think... perhaps you've flipped! LOL

Seriously, Gloria, whatever it is that caused you to write this poem.... forget about it... Give it up!

Hang around, kiddo! Your writing has improved tremendously within the past few months. I love to watch a writer growing like that. Very bad time to drop the pen...

doreen

Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
11 posted 2000-03-24 05:03 PM


RELAX, you all can't get rid of me that easy, it would be like running away from home sweet home. Where would my mind have to release all this creative energy. Forgive me for my insanity for I lost conciousness with my mind, but I'm back together again...LOL
Denise
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12 posted 2000-03-24 05:36 PM


Whew! Well that's a relief!! Glad to hear you are staying!!  

Denise

wayoutwalt
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13 posted 2000-03-24 08:55 PM


miss lost i got no pun for the relief i got this was an evolvin poem that turned out well yuhuyuhyuyuyhuy
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14 posted 2000-03-24 09:12 PM


LostDreamer~
Gosh darn it !  
I read this post this morning ...
and all day I stewed over the perfect
response ... now you've come to your
senses and my well-crafted response
no longer has merit.

(think I'm kidding?  I went back and
counted all of the poems you'd posted
in the last 45 days and the # of responses
you received and the ratio of posts to
replies and not only that .....
I HATE MATH ... but I did it for YOU !)
And I just burned it !

Silly girl ... you know you'd never be
able to run far enough to hide from
this family of friends ....
why we'd have your picture posted in
all major browser windows in nothing flat !

Whew ! Now smile that smile
and get busy !
RIDING LESSONS START TOMORROW !
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


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