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~Close Your Eyes...Come To Me~
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~Close Your Eyes...Come To Me~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Close your eyes and come to me, this between us is meant to be. Dream this dream that we both share, take my hand, take me there. Close your eyes and breath me in, feel my touch, this innocent sin. See the flame of candles glowing, surrender to these passions flowing. Close your eyes and lift up to me, Body and Soul, Spirit free, Envision all of this fantasy's pleasures, moments of elation ... ours to treasure. Close your eyes and lay your body down, in my essence...sweetly drown. Whisper your secrets, say my name, in these moments, hearts know no shame. Close your eyes, and feel my embrace, surrender will deliver us in its grace. As two become one...we'll make this discovery, close your eyes then come to me...together we'll know ecstasy. Janet Marie for my partner in rhyme...thank you for the inspiration. < !signature--> and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-24-2000).] |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
Speechless, this is truly BEAUTIFUL! WOW!  take care, Broken Wings "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Smiling...oh to have a partner in rhyme like that |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
J.M. This was AMAZING!!! I was going to try to pick my favorite part but I just couldn't!! Beautiful, touching and written with the light and love of your heart and soul instead of the darkness. You have such an amazing gift. *AWHs* my friend and sister of my soul You are Awesome!!!!! Whatever strength I add to myself becomes my greatest weakness, while whatever weakness I'll consciously endure will be replaced with a strength that is not my own. G. Finley |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
this is a wonderful poem JM Close your eyes and lift up to me, Body and Soul, Spirit free, I think these are my favorite lines and the ones that embody what you are conveying in this poem. A beautiful soft touching tribute to your love. "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two bodies." -Aristotle |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Love this poem! This is truly an emotionally strong, heartfelt feeling. Great Job! |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
This certainly brings back memories ... and they're good ones too! Rex}<{{{{o> |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, Wonderful poem, good thoughts, good words, well done. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Janet Marie~ Very enjoyable and thought-provoking. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Such potent poetic seduction...so nicely written. ~ Claire |
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christies heart Member
since 1999-08-10
Posts 189NJ, USA |
Ditto to all the comments above. You're poetry is always so beautiful, and awe inspiring. I also think you could corner the market on romance novel writing if you ever took a stab at it!  Chris..Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians Native American prayer |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
such lovely thoughts, whomeer comes will be quite lucky. David2 |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
"Close your eyes and breathe me in". Wow, what a line! Sometimes we see best with our eyes closed. Being the romantic i am, you know i like this poem. Excellent rhyme JM. So nice and sensual! A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Janet Marie~ This is so beautifully enchanting~ So beautifully seductive~ So very beautiful~ Marie~ "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind; And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
once again humbled...these kinds of poems come harder for me...you have no idea how much your encouragement of this one helps me grow...how does one say thank you for that? TO ALL of you...I am in your debt poeticly  THANK YOU SO VERY MUCH!! TAKE CARE, janet marie Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JM....beautiful words. Just loved the last stanza. You are very lucky to be inspired in such a way!!! It doesn't hurt to have the right inspiration either!!!! LOL Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You have written such lovely words of love with much passion. Wonderful! |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
Gee Wizz lol everyone already said it all so ill just say i agree with them i love it and it is beautiful. great job on this |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
I have an emergency...my computer is smoking big time!!! LOL....Wowza...the girl is on fire!! In all seriousness, this was just plain GOOD! Where you been keeping this part of your writing at? You leave the Aimster in awe again. Kudos to such beautiful writing! AMY love ya. ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Janet Marie, How I am enjoying your poetry. This one is so tender and passionate, very well written. There are lots of wonderful phrases here Liz |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is beautiful as is all of your other poetry. Thank you for sharing it with us! Love and hugs, Lizzie |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
JM-This was a lovely poem.I have not post replies much do to my busy schedule but want you to know I have enjoyed reading your poetry. You are a giftef writer. |
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