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Marina
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0 posted 03-23-2000 08:18 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marina

Faded Perfume

Hot summer nights
Under stars with moonlight
A heart in flight
Taken by love’s bite

He said forever
But then a parting letter
You should have known better
Pale cheeks could be no wetter

Love, you thought would bloom
Brings nothing but gloom
Dying alone in your tomb
For love lasted as long, as faded perfume


Marina Mar.12 2000


© Copyright 2000 Marina Crossley - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 03-23-2000 08:28 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is very sad, Marina. Beautifully done.

Denise
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2 posted 03-23-2000 08:29 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Marina~
The nostalgic sadness wanders
through this one.  
Wonderful job, gal.
~*Marge*~


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kitkat
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3 posted 03-23-2000 08:53 PM       View Profile for kitkat   Email kitkat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kitkat

I loved your last line. It sums up what sounds like "summer love" very nicely.
Alwye
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4 posted 03-23-2000 11:07 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Indeed very sad this is.  Love does all too often fade like perfume for so many..

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~


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5 posted 03-23-2000 11:13 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Marina,
       the haunting scent still lingers in my mind and in my soul. . .

This is beautiful. . . you have indeed captured the sadness and the longing. . .

Beautiful words from a beautiful poet. . .

----------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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6 posted 03-23-2000 11:35 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

wonderful closing to this one  
JamesMichael
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7 posted 03-23-2000 11:50 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

When we first meet someone we are captivated by them and we admire so many attributes...and we might find ourselves thinking...where has this person been all my life...soon reality sets in and we might find ourselves thinking..I don't care where they were but how the heck do I get them out of my life...ha..ha..sad but true..and these were thoughts brought on by you and some faded perfume.  Lovely poem and the last four lines are magic.  Bring out some fresh perfume.   James
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8 posted 03-24-2000 12:40 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

*sigh*
i love this sweet sad poem Marina....

"He said forever
But then a parting letter
You should have known better
**Pale cheeks could be no wetter"

**I love that line...
this was really an emotionally beautiful poem.
take care, jm




 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman


Mel~
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9 posted 03-24-2000 12:50 AM       View Profile for Mel~   Email Mel~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mel~'s Home Page   View IP for Mel~

a beautiful, yet sad poem, brought me close to tears
Danny Holloway
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10 posted 03-24-2000 11:37 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Marina, this was a very nice poem.  I liked the way you wrapped up the ending.  Nice rhyme also.
Good writing as usual.

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.
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yes I have to agree with the others a beautiful poem and the last line says it all

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bodies."
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Parker
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12 posted 03-24-2000 01:46 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Marina, really liked this one, tragic reality of fading relationships.

Parker
TerryW
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13 posted 03-24-2000 05:09 PM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Marina,
     Yes, I can feel the loss.  It is painful when love and friendship slip away.  And it is more painful to ever get it back. Great poem....

 Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
Marina
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14 posted 03-24-2000 08:30 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Denise,Marge,KitKat,Alwye: thank you all for your responses.

Sven,thank you. Such a wonderful compliment from a beautiful person and poet.

Ruth,thank you

James,thanks and I think that unfortunitly that your right.

JM,thanks I like that verse too.

Mel, thanks and sorry about the tear thing!

Danny,I can always count on you for such a sweet response. Thank you

Tesss, thanks

James,thank you. In this case it was definitly for the best.

Teryy,thanks very much and welcome to Passions!
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