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Chemical Abuse

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Elizabeth Santos
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Chemical Abuse

Her hair on top is thinning
She’s getting old it seems
She consumes more than she should consume
She’s bursting at the seams

Her face is parched, she's turning grey
Her voice is out of tune
Heat flashes in the winter time
And shivering in June

Her blood is filled with chemicals
Her arteries are clogged
Her skin is getting wrinkled
It's the same old dialogue

She asks why this is happening
So far before her time
She thought herself still rather young
Not even in her prime

She’s losing all her beauty
It’s not a natural course
But her body was abused so long
And now she’s in remorse

She’s still a dear old friend to me
A treasure of great worth
But she’s not the same as she once was
My dear friend, Mother Earth

Elizabeth Santos
© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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Oh Liz, this is wonderful!!! What a great surprise ending...at first I thought you were talking about me.  So sad what is happening to our beautiful earth.
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2 posted 03-23-2000 08:26 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Oh, Elizabeth~
This is just wonderful.
This little Cherokee loves it and
the spirits of the heritage have
chanted the message for generations.

I am moved by your render.
Thank you for these precious thoughts.
~*Marge*~



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Elizabeth Santos
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Martie, You will always be young.
Thank you
Liz
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Well, you got me! Nicely done.
    David2
Elizabeth Santos
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Marge,
You always have such pleasant words
But I know this subject is close to your heart
Thanks for the sweet comments
Liz
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You got me with the ending too, Elizabeth! This is great!

Denise
Elizabeth Santos
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David,
Yep, It's a "gotcha poem". Glad you liked it
Thanks
Liz

Denise, You snuck in too. Thank you
Liz

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 03-23-2000).]
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Wonderful poem! This makes it seem more real, easier to relate to... I think you should submit it!  
hoot_owl_rn
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Wow Liz...you certainly said a mouthful with this one....sad, but true  
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10 posted 03-24-2000 10:41 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

What a surprise that was! And it is something we should all pay attention to.

Elizabeth

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-The Crucible

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What an ending, Liz! I totally agree!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
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Don't worry about dear Mother Earth.
She'll clean out all her pores.
She simply gives her head a shake
And....goodbye, dinosaurs!

You think I'm kidding? You can ask
That fella known as Noah
Or all the folks that used to live
Around Mt. Krakatoa!

Fear not for Mother Nature, girl.
She is a strong old cuss.
You better shake your pretty head
And worry about us!!  
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My God Liz, what a great ending, and so true. Excellent stuff, I love it!!
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Liz
You got me, this is fantastic
you have written it so well and I enjoyed the end immensely
tracie


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Elizabeth Santos
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Balladeer
Great response! Yeh, that's what I am worried about. The planet will be fine, we, however are self destructive, Thanks

PDV,
Thanks, dear, You are sweet.Glad you liked it

Hoot,Where I live was once like where you live, but it's going fast Thanks
Liz

Thanks, Elizabeth for your response. Now that I type your name, I remember why I swithched to Liz. hehe
Liz

Lovebug, hope it's still green where you are.Thank you
Liz

Vamp, Thanks for your comments.
Liz

Tracie
Your comments are always appreciated. Thank you, Tracie
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Elizabeth,
Excellent and bravo, and I was also thinking along the lines of balladeer. Love ya Sy
 
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