The well is empty (arostic sonnet)

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Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

0 posted 2000-03-23 12:29 PM

This empty well, this void and vacant hole,
Holds nothing more of hoping or of strife,
Except the fading whispers of a soul
Which haunts the crypt with memories of life.
Enfeebled now the words, where once they sang
Like fledgeling hawks, defiant of the sky;
Launched bold into the blue, while heavens rang
In echoes of that wild, triumphant cry.
So dies the dream, in silence doubly loud --
Entombed before the shade could steal the breath --
Made prisoner 'til he who smooths the shroud
Puts forth his hand to grant the boon of death.
This well, where once the waters issued sweet,
Yearns only now for emptiness complete.

Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...

--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

David2
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since 2000-03-22

Posts 407

1 posted 2000-03-23 12:45 PM

Sonnets are my favorite form of expression and this one is wonderful. How well you expressed your feelings. It was very lyrical and extremely well crafted. I loved it!
David2

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

2 posted 2000-03-23 01:33 PM

Amazing piece, Kess. Powerful and painful. I don't know if emptiness ever could be completed - but I think you've come close with this one.

Michael

Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

3 posted 2000-03-23 03:29 PM

Have missed your postings... but when you return, you do so in a blaze of glory.
Exceptional as always.

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15

Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK

4 posted 2000-03-23 03:31 PM

Well done I think. Very nice rhyme also.
Your writing is always excellent!

A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

5 posted 2000-03-23 03:43 PM

So nice to see you again, Kess! A sonnet and an acrostic one as well!! This is excellently done, as always!

Denise

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

6 posted 2000-03-23 10:51 PM

Kess...this is an excellent piece

Elizabeth

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since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

7 posted 2000-03-23 10:55 PM

Very good work here, Skyfyre. I enjoyed it.

Elizabeth

"He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2000-03-23 11:16 PM

You have always found the way to my soul Kess. . . this is no exception. . . I think that you are indeed writing the best in your life. . . and we are indeed lucky to be the receivers of your soul.

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

9 posted 2002-01-14 10:46 AM

yes, an empty well....Oh God, this speaks to me.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

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