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Local Rebel
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0 posted 2000-03-23 10:45 AM


I looked up at Jupiter
Damn spot out
there looking down
on me like some
giant red cycloptic eye
hasn't changed one bit
since dreaming of
Star Trekking and
Captain Kirk swashing
Un-buckled to Venusian
Goddesses Y2K flying cars
and moon colonies

Orwell's year come and gone
with little fanfare
as the walls came
tumbling down around
Gorbechev's damn spot

Never had a hummer
in my office talking to
foreign heads
telephoned spotting up
navy blue dresses

Some kinda mid-life crisis
people call it when you're
spotting the big four
Oh…act like I've lost my
mind or something but
if you ask me I was crazy
all those years before
and it's Sanity that
makes people really uncomfortable
cause they don't want to
hear that they're chasing
their own tails and
might as well be trying
to varnish Jupiter
by Jupiter

Excuse me if I'm between
dreams right now
but I don't think
I'm going back to sleep

I think I've spotted something
better




 Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran

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David2
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1 posted 2000-03-23 10:51 AM


I will have to reread this one to get the full effect but I had to comment on it now. I enjoyed every moment reading it. Isn't that the true test of poetry, enjoyment?
            David2

Martie
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2 posted 2000-03-23 10:57 AM


Where is that Jupiter anyway...I think tonight I need to know...I like listening to what is in your head...which is how it seems reading your poetry.
Denise
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3 posted 2000-03-23 10:58 AM


Interesting read, LR. Between dreams, I like that. You've given me something to ponder. Thank you!

Denise

Local Rebel
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4 posted 2000-03-23 12:04 PM


Thank you all!  and you're welcome d...  
RainbowGirl
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5 posted 2000-03-23 12:23 PM


ROFL....You're a case, must be that star, huh?

HUSG

devina
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6 posted 2000-03-23 12:38 PM


Alright LR...no more Star Trek before bedtime mr...
*picking you up by the shirt tail and dragging your butt to bed*

Don't stay up too late tonight sir!!!

Cute poem!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


Local Rebel
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7 posted 2000-03-23 04:38 PM


Thank you RG...

And devina -- hmmm... I thought you of all people appreciated a man who was up all night??  lol

PhaerieChild
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8 posted 2000-03-23 07:02 PM


This is what happens in between dreams? My, star trek sure has a profound effect on the psyche. Love the poem.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



Nan
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9 posted 2000-03-23 07:41 PM


Between dreams... yeah, that's it... I'm just between dreams... Thanks, LR..
Nan
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10 posted 2000-03-23 07:42 PM


... or is that Justin Between Dreams..?
doreen peri
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11 posted 2000-03-23 09:30 PM


You never had a humma? What a bumma!

Oh, I mean, you never had one in your office while on the phone with somebody important... well, that could change your whole outlook on life, y'know? Talk about going to Jupiter and back!

Seriously, though, loved this poem LR- am glad I visited your website the other day to discover your talent. In between dreams... I know all about that! And you've phrased it so vividly here... Well done!

doreen

hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 2000-03-23 11:36 PM


Smiling here...loved the end  
Tess
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13 posted 2000-03-24 02:56 AM


hey !!!loved this one !!!
Had me grinning from start to finish....and at least it was never boring!!

Tess  

 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle


Local Rebel
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14 posted 2000-03-24 09:42 AM


Oh my... what responses.... Doreen... I was just trying to say I never made it to president either.. LOL... but... if there are any volunteers who want to help out with the hummer part!!! LOL...

Thanks everyone..

doreen peri
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15 posted 2000-03-24 12:25 PM


I get it... hehe... duh!  

These lines were terrific, btw:

"and it's Sanity that
makes people really uncomfortable
cause they don't want to
hear that they're chasing
their own tails"

       
doreen

[This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 03-25-2000).]

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