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Local Rebel
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0 posted 03-23-2000 10:45 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Local Rebel

I looked up at Jupiter
Damn spot out
there looking down
on me like some
giant red cycloptic eye
hasn't changed one bit
since dreaming of
Star Trekking and
Captain Kirk swashing
Un-buckled to Venusian
Goddesses Y2K flying cars
and moon colonies

Orwell's year come and gone
with little fanfare
as the walls came
tumbling down around
Gorbechev's damn spot

Never had a hummer
in my office talking to
foreign heads
telephoned spotting up
navy blue dresses

Some kinda mid-life crisis
people call it when you're
spotting the big four
Oh…act like I've lost my
mind or something but
if you ask me I was crazy
all those years before
and it's Sanity that
makes people really uncomfortable
cause they don't want to
hear that they're chasing
their own tails and
might as well be trying
to varnish Jupiter
by Jupiter

Excuse me if I'm between
dreams right now
but I don't think
I'm going back to sleep

I think I've spotted something
better




 Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran
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David2
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1 posted 03-23-2000 10:51 AM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

I will have to reread this one to get the full effect but I had to comment on it now. I enjoyed every moment reading it. Isn't that the true test of poetry, enjoyment?
            David2
Martie
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2 posted 03-23-2000 10:57 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Where is that Jupiter anyway...I think tonight I need to know...I like listening to what is in your head...which is how it seems reading your poetry.
Denise
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3 posted 03-23-2000 10:58 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Interesting read, LR. Between dreams, I like that. You've given me something to ponder. Thank you!

Denise
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4 posted 03-23-2000 12:04 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Thank you all!  and you're welcome d...  
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5 posted 03-23-2000 12:23 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

ROFL....You're a case, must be that star, huh?

HUSG
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6 posted 03-23-2000 12:38 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Alright LR...no more Star Trek before bedtime mr...
*picking you up by the shirt tail and dragging your butt to bed*

Don't stay up too late tonight sir!!!

Cute poem!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Local Rebel
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7 posted 03-23-2000 04:38 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Thank you RG...

And devina -- hmmm... I thought you of all people appreciated a man who was up all night??  lol
PhaerieChild
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8 posted 03-23-2000 07:02 PM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

This is what happens in between dreams? My, star trek sure has a profound effect on the psyche. Love the poem.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


Nan
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9 posted 03-23-2000 07:41 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Between dreams... yeah, that's it... I'm just between dreams... Thanks, LR..
Nan
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10 posted 03-23-2000 07:42 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

... or is that Justin Between Dreams..?
doreen peri
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11 posted 03-23-2000 09:30 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

You never had a humma? What a bumma!

Oh, I mean, you never had one in your office while on the phone with somebody important... well, that could change your whole outlook on life, y'know? Talk about going to Jupiter and back!

Seriously, though, loved this poem LR- am glad I visited your website the other day to discover your talent. In between dreams... I know all about that! And you've phrased it so vividly here... Well done!

doreen
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12 posted 03-23-2000 11:36 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Smiling here...loved the end  
Tess
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13 posted 03-24-2000 02:56 AM       View Profile for Tess   Email Tess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tess's Home Page   View IP for Tess

hey !!!loved this one !!!
Had me grinning from start to finish....and at least it was never boring!!

Tess  

 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle

Local Rebel
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14 posted 03-24-2000 09:42 AM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Oh my... what responses.... Doreen... I was just trying to say I never made it to president either.. LOL... but... if there are any volunteers who want to help out with the hummer part!!! LOL...

Thanks everyone..
doreen peri
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15 posted 03-24-2000 12:25 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

I get it... hehe... duh!  

These lines were terrific, btw:

"and it's Sanity that
makes people really uncomfortable
cause they don't want to
hear that they're chasing
their own tails"

       
doreen

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