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A Loving Disguise

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christies heart
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0 posted 03-23-2000 09:01 AM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for christies heart

You've treasured my soul, or so you have said.
On damaged ground you've known that I tread.
I've engulfed you so real in my trust-weary hold,
when finally secured, you've cracked this safe mold.

You've held my hand, my strength you have praised,
knowing I've conquered the demons once raised.
Yet, the faith in my heart you claim to hold true
crumbles, dismayed at words not so new.

All the time knowing the self I've become
you've kept up the farce that our dreams are one.
Yet, then, through the fire, you've stolen some flame,igniting it now in hate-words of blame.

Then when faith dies, as always it must,
the rest of the days I spend burying trust.
Only in moments I will remember time's lies
and find myself mourning your loving disguise.


 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer




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David2
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1 posted 03-23-2000 09:50 AM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

Then when faith dies, as always it must,
the rest of the days I spend burying trust.
Only in moments I will remember time's lies
and find myself mourning your loving disguise.



I used to feel this way, but no longer. Love is worth the pain of rejection. Someday the one love of your life will appear, and even if he never does, the search for him can be exhilarating. Beautiful poem.

david2  
Danny Holloway
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2 posted 03-23-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

The emotion pours out of this piece.  Hurt feelings not soon to pass.
Good expression and rhyme.
busylisa_ca
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3 posted 03-23-2000 09:39 PM       View Profile for busylisa_ca   Email busylisa_ca   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for busylisa_ca

Very touching poem, I'm sure we all feel this way sometimes when our trust is broken.  Build it back up and move on, your right man is out there somewhere!
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 03-23-2000 09:56 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Lovely poem,
You will learn to trust again
You will learn to love again
Liz
christies heart
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5 posted 03-24-2000 01:46 PM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christies heart

Thank you all for your responses.

David2- I know what It is like to feel this way and fully trusting, even with the same individual at different times. This is my greatest struggle.

Danny H-True. Hurt feelings need at least to be expressed before then begin to pass. Thanks for your response.

busylisa..  I still hope the right man is my husband...ha. But this poem expressess how, even in a trusting, loving relationship, our faith can be so challenged.

ES-Thank you as well. You are right. Trusting and Loving can sometimes be tested agian and again!

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


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6 posted 03-24-2000 01:55 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Christie~
When faith is challenged ...
we are uplifted to meet the challenge.
Wonderful soul-seeking message.
I just plain down-right like it !
~*Marge*~


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TerryW
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7 posted 03-24-2000 02:53 PM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Love this piece!  I have been in this position myself, and it does take a while to get over.  I buried my trust, too, but after a long enough time, I found myself digging it back up again.  Time heals all wounds.

T

 Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
christies heart
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8 posted 03-25-2000 05:52 AM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christies heart

Marge, Thank you for such nice feedback. It means a lot coming from you.  

Terry, Thank you very much. It is very true what they say about time. I have learned that lesson "time" and "time" again.  

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


Tess
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9 posted 03-25-2000 06:36 AM       View Profile for Tess   Email Tess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tess's Home Page   View IP for Tess

Ths poem expresses those feelings of trust betrayed so well...when you finally let someone into your mind and heart to discover later it was only deception and lies...and each time it happens it becomes harder to trust.


 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle

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