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Nicole
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0 posted 03-23-2000 03:29 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Nicole

Please…just go away my dear, I walk this path alone
The distance to ‘me’ is far too great, my heart is made of stone
Shakespeare crossed the stars for me and all I dare to love
Surely, to try would be to risk all you’ve ever dreamed of
No love, don’t…don’t look at me, it tears my heart apart
Seeing what you possess to give, in what I can never take part
In living a life so comforting, in loving my love for you
‘Tis a dream I hold in hands, that never will come true
So you see my sweet, I’d given up before the game began
Its hard for me to see blindly past Truth’s master plan
And as much as I want right now to be held in your embrace
I know for certain that my life, is neither the time nor place
Kiss me softly and walk away, the very last goodbye
Move on my dear don’t turn around, lest you see me cry…



 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown
© Copyright 2000 Nicole Adams - All Rights Reserved
neitham
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1 posted 03-23-2000 03:33 AM       View Profile for neitham   Email neitham   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit neitham's Home Page   View IP for neitham

Is it a figment of your imagination or is it based on a real story? Whatever is it maybe, it sure was very powerful and very touching. I did enjoy reading it, very much,

Rgds,
neitham
Michael
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2 posted 03-23-2000 03:37 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

My God, this is heartwrenching.  I don't think "anyone" is pre-ordained to be alone.  I can certainly relate to the emptiness and the futility behind this.  The denial of "love" itself being something you could experience... but to give in to that feeling...what is then left?  

Beautiful but very sad poem.  (((HUGS)))


Michael

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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


3 posted 03-23-2000 04:16 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Well done m'friend, but allow me to say on a personal note, that if this is wat you truly believe, then it is only because you believe it. We "can't" do something, because we convince ourselves that we can't. Get into the "can," and see what happens... you never know...
~one voice~
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4 posted 03-23-2000 05:50 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Nikki, this is so beautiful...  it made me cry!  One of the best that I have seen, my friend!  Truly!  

 ~onevoice~

"And Something's odd-within-
That person that I was-
And this One-do not feel the same-
Could it be Madness-this?"
Emily Dickinson

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 03-23-2000 06:58 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Satiate~
Sadly, a tender render of loss from you.
Just remember ... as you are walking
away from someone or someplace ...
you are walking toward another.
Smile and wrap a great big *HUG*
around you.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Nicole
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6 posted 03-23-2000 02:39 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

neitham: You mean my real life and my imagination aren't the same thing??     Sometimes we have things that need to get out, and although this is not true to the letter...the emotions/feelings are there, and they needed to escape.

Michael: My friend, I know and thank you, for understanding where I usually am coming from...scary as that may be at times.    Worry not, I haven't totally given up hope yet.

Chris:  So...you leave us all for days and days...you come back, and all of a sudden you're the Engine that Could?!    LOL  Seriously though, you're right (and I won't admit that again for a while!)...the only think holding people back are themselves.

Erin, girl!     It's so good to see you back again, thanks muchly.

Marge:  Bless your sweet self...you always have the most wonderfully uplifting things to say, and always have many smiles to hand out.     Thankyou
Dr.Moose1
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7 posted 03-23-2000 04:31 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Surely one who can put the pen to such feelings can put fate in it's place
Doc
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8 posted 03-23-2000 06:11 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

All I can say is...

however much of this is apocryphal and however much is literal...

it is a very touching poem and having been separated by death from love, I shant ever be again for any lesser reason, distance, money, time, (kids would have to be balanced in there somewhere), no argument, no slight, no wandering eye.... nope...
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 03-23-2000 11:19 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Oh, this is wonderful, but oh so sad. I think this is amoung the best of your works I have yet to see. Seems like you need a big hug
((((HUGS))))
    

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