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Elliptical Light Evermore

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Martie
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Elliptical Light Evermore

I am walking in a shadow
that distills tactility,
nor does it listen
to this race of time
that quickens each step
Ďtil breathing is my focus.

I am tired of the constancy
that keeps me from withering,
when I would sink and soak
my hands in the earth
until I could feel my own pulse
there in the mire
fired and magical
as this orb of moon
that carries meaning
in its circumference.

Feelings are so fragile
as this waning candle,
they step with precision
touching each stone
to be sure of motivation,
gauging each word for purity.

I want to fly
past the edge of meaning
and be effortless translucent flow
mingled and pressed by stars
torn by storms density
until I find passionís gate open
and calling to me

and there to glide
that elliptical light

evermore.



[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 03-22-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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Martie,
Although I love rhyme, yours is the only free verse poetry I read with delight and joy. You fly like a bird. *L*
Nan
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Sy, that's because she has just the right touch of rhythm, and her imagery is always wonderful... shhhh... don't tell her I gave away her secrets, OK???
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3 posted 03-22-2000 08:35 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
You know - that I know - that Seymour knows fine poetry .... so, you know - that I know -that you know, without me telling you I know, that I have been known to like the things you know well enough to let us know about them.

And from this deduction I have drawn the conclusion that you knew all along that
I WOULD LOVE THIS !  
And I do .... ya' know !  
THAT MOON ROCKS !
~*Marge*~



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Simply beautiful writing, Martie! But of course!

Denise
Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 03-22-2000 09:11 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

What did she say???

Anyway, Martie, again an outstanding verse, and I also know good poetry when I see it.You know that I one of your greatest fans.
Love ya,
Liz
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Martie, this is absolutely stunning..you have touched my soul with your words and I relate deeply.  Your work is so beautiful, just as it always is.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~


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Sy--Your kind words make me fly!

Nan--You're so cute and such a sweetheart

Marge--Yes, I knew all along that you would like it, and LOL, ya know?

Denise--But of course you always reply with such sweet words.

Liz--Thanks for being a fan...ahhh..not sure what I said..Love ya

Krista--I'm so glad that you relate this way to this poem...to touch anothers soul is wonderful!!
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Elusively fine  
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Martie,
   Although I am not a great fan of free verse, I am a fan of fine poetry. Thank you for the ride.
      David2
  
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I DO LOVE free verse and I think this is an excellent example of it

I love the words..even if l dont understand some of it the feeling is still there
  

Tess

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bodies."
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Ruth--Thank you friend, for reading.

David--What a fine compliment from such a talented rhymer.

Tess--I'm glad, because it is the feeling that matters...
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Once again you have created a beautiful work of art my friend.  It simply boggles my poor mind how you maintain such of flow of exquisite poems.  I finished the poem and realized I had a smile of contentment on my face.   Wonderful poem Martie.  (p.s. and yes, you were right about the moon.. smile)
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I want to fly
past the edge of meaning
and be effortless translucent flow
mingled and pressed by stars
torn by storms density
until I find passionís gate open
and calling to me


Wonderful stuff Martie -- from a 'free' man to a 'free' woman...
Danny Holloway
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I enjoyed this verse very much.
Well done.
Dr.Moose1
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I too usually fail to grasp the what is intended with free verse ,but you sure paint one vivid picture here
Doc
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Mike--I can't imagine your mind being boggled, but sure glad I made a smile!

Local Rebel--Thanks for being free with me.

Danny--Thank you, I'm so glad you read my poem.

I'll paint for you any time Doc...Thanks.
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