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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Legend Blackest pitch of night Innocence will not prevail In darkest dungeons Love has failed Removed was the armour That exposed Satan’s soul Even pleads of desperation Won’t deliver from the devil’s hole Speak no more of freedom Dark ears only listen with a grin In flames of fearless fire To late to repent your sin A sacred soul up for sale The devil will always buy in the end Eternity in hideous Hell Forever to partake in his legend Marina Mar 20 2000 |
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Talaira Junior Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 10Colorado |
Beautiful and bone chilling |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Marina, Sinister, but well written. Nice job!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
This is different. Chilling for sure. Good indication of your broad writing ability. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Taliara and Lone Wolf, thank you. Danny. I was getting a little bored with my same old writing...so I thought Id try something a little bad. Well perhaps dark would be a better word,being as I'm somewhat bad in adult. ( a least that's what they tell me...although I'm sure I don't know!) Marina |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Marina~ Guess my read is a little different ... I found it uplifting in the sense that it serves as a reminder to me that satan is a 'living' legend that I don't want to meet up with. 'A sacred soul up for sale The devil will always buy in the end Eternity in hideous Hell Forever to partake in his legend' Quite graphic and certainly showcases your versatility. Good work. ~Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Okay, first about the poem. . . this was excellent Marina. . . you have captured your subject well. . . "A sacred soul up for sale", I like the idea. . . Now, you know I couldn't let that second one go Marina!! You're not just "somewhat" bad. . . you're downright terrible!! LOL  ----------------------------------------------------< !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 03-22-2000).] |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Marge, thank you for seeing this in a different light, yours was a very unique point of view. Marina |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
well, all I have to say is when your bad your REALLY GOOD!!!! this was awesome...you took us all straight to hell... excellent Marina, truly. jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sven..first about my poem..thank you. Now about this second part..I thought you liked me bad? JM, thank you very much...hey what the helll! Marina |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I think "speak no more of freedom" captures the very essense of love that failed and a living hell. James |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Haunting  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Marina, I plead the 5th. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
James,thank you and that is a very interesting way of looking at that line..if not the whole poem. Hoot, thank you Sven, I refuse to let you plead the 5th. Marina |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Very Good! I like the versatility in your writing. You have a wonderful talent! |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Terry,thank you very much your reply and your compliment. Marina |
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