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Marina
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Legend


Blackest pitch of night
Innocence will not prevail
In darkest dungeons
Love has failed

Removed was the armour
That exposed Satanís soul
Even pleads of desperation
Wonít deliver from the devilís hole

Speak no more of freedom
Dark ears only listen with a grin
In flames of fearless fire
To late to repent your sin

A sacred soul up for sale
The devil will always buy in the end
Eternity in hideous Hell
Forever to partake in his legend


Marina Mar 20 2000


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Talaira
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Beautiful and bone chilling
Lone Wolf
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Marina,
Sinister, but well written.  Nice job!!

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
Danny Holloway
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This is different.  Chilling for sure.
Good indication of your broad writing ability.
Marina
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4 posted 03-22-2000 08:20 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Taliara and Lone Wolf, thank you.

Danny. I was getting a little bored with my same old writing...so I thought Id try something a little bad.  Well perhaps dark would be a better word,being as I'm somewhat bad in adult. ( a least that's what they tell me...although I'm sure I don't know!)

Marina
Marge Tindal
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Marina~
Guess my read is a little different ...

I found it uplifting in the sense that
it serves as a reminder to me that satan is a 'living' legend that I don't want to meet up with.

'A sacred soul up for sale
The devil will always buy in the end
Eternity in hideous Hell
Forever to partake in his legend'

Quite graphic and certainly showcases
your versatility.  Good work.
~Marge*~


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Okay, first about the poem. . . this was excellent Marina. . . you have captured your subject well. . . "A sacred soul up for sale", I like the idea. . .

Now, you know I couldn't let that second one go Marina!!  You're not just "somewhat" bad. . . you're downright terrible!!  LOL  

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†That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl



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Marina
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7 posted 03-23-2000 01:42 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Marge, thank you for seeing this in a different light, yours was a very unique point of view.

Marina
Janet Marie
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well, all I have to say is when your bad your REALLY GOOD!!!!
this was awesome...you took us all straight to hell...
excellent Marina, truly.
jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman


Marina
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Sven..first about my poem..thank you.  Now about this second part..I thought you liked me bad?

JM, thank you very much...hey what the helll!

Marina
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I think "speak no more of freedom" captures the very essense of love that failed and a living hell.   James
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Haunting  
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Marina,
       I plead the 5th. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Marina
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13 posted 03-24-2000 12:17 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

James,thank you and that is a very interesting way of looking at that line..if not the whole poem.

Hoot, thank you

Sven, I refuse to let you plead the 5th.

Marina
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Very Good!
    I like the versatility in your writing.  You have a wonderful talent!    
Marina
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Terry,thank you very much your reply and your compliment.

Marina
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