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My apple
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My apple |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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My apple Five sentinel stand guard in line, The sentient of my mind. And they all bow in obeyance, To the aura of her presence. Her spirit lives my ivory tower, Decants the fragrance of her flower. And I, a patron this matron, In this second Eden beckon. She is the core that holds the store. She is the key my evermore. She's the beginning and the past, The very first step and the last. She is the substance of my goal, The other half of my soul. She is my tower of retreat, And is my Eden full complete. She is the priestess of my chapel And my Eve, without the apple. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"She" inspired one amazing fine poem as well, Seymour this is perfection of poerty... excellent...I love this one... very nice take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This poem is delicious to the core. The last two lines..perfect! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, A lovely comment, thank you so much. *L* Martie, Thank you Martie, for a cute and sweet comment. *L* |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, I'll have to second Martie on this one. I love the last two lines. You are an inspiring poet Superb, as always Love ya Liz |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Very interesting, although I am not sure of some of the references. Who or what are the five sentinels? I hope this is not an offensive question and if it is I apologize in advance, I am brand new to your number. Thanks for an enjoyable poem. David2 |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Thank you for the sweet comment. Love Sy David2, Didn't mean to be that subtle, the five sentinels are, touch, smell, sound, taste and sight. These are the five senses. I hope it helped. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
  [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 03-22-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so beautiful, Sy! I,too especially loved the closing couplet! So creative! Denise |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Breathtaking!!! Beuatiful and she sure is a lucky lady to have inspired this. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ Again, my friend ... again. 'She is the substance of my goal, The other half of my soul. She is my tower of retreat, And is my Eden full complete.' What a love you are ... and what a love you have. Beautiful to see loving emotion displayed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent as always Sy. . . you do have a way with words, my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Again I enjoy the fruit of your labors, my friend  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, Did I say there was only one apple? *L* Denise, Thank you sweet. *L* Wild Child, That is a very sweet comment, thank you. Marge, Wonderful comment, I love you too. Sy Sven, Nice to hear from you and thanks for the nice comment. Balladeer, Just to know you read my stuff is a lift to me. Sy |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Seymore...ah, to be the apple of your eye must be a wonderful thing |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Such verse of adoration writ with poetic celebration... ...beautiful, Seymour. |
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