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My apple

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 03-22-2000 11:24 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

              My apple

Five sentinel stand guard in line,
The sentient of my mind.
And they all bow in obeyance,
To the aura of her presence.

Her spirit lives my ivory tower,
Decants the fragrance of her flower.
And I, a patron this matron,
In this second Eden beckon.

She is the core that holds the store.
She is the key my evermore.
She's the beginning and the past,
The very first step and the last.

She is the substance of my goal,
The other half of my soul.
She is my tower of retreat,
And is my Eden full complete.

She is the priestess of my chapel
And my Eve, without the apple.  

© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 03-22-2000 11:28 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

"She" inspired one amazing fine poem as well, Seymour this is perfection of poerty... excellent...I love this one...
very nice
take care, jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman


Martie
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2 posted 03-22-2000 03:01 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This poem is delicious to the core.  

The last two lines..perfect!
Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 03-22-2000 06:33 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Janet,
A lovely comment, thank you so much. *L*

Martie,
Thank you Martie, for a cute and sweet comment. *L*
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 03-22-2000 06:42 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
I'll have to second Martie on this one. I love the last two lines.
You are an inspiring poet
Superb, as always
Love ya
Liz
David2
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Very interesting, although I am not sure of some of the references. Who or what are the five sentinels? I hope this is not an offensive question and if it is I apologize in advance, I am brand new to your number. Thanks for an enjoyable poem.
        David2
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 03-22-2000 09:17 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
Thank you for the sweet comment. Love Sy

David2,
Didn't mean to be that subtle, the five sentinels are, touch, smell, sound, taste and
sight. These are the five senses. I hope it helped.
Nan
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7 posted 03-22-2000 09:23 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

... and here I thought I was the apple of yer eye....  






[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 03-22-2000).]
Denise
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8 posted 03-22-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is so beautiful, Sy! I,too especially loved the closing couplet! So creative!

Denise
PhaerieChild
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9 posted 03-22-2000 09:31 PM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Breathtaking!!! Beuatiful and she sure is a lucky lady to have inspired this.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
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Marge Tindal
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10 posted 03-22-2000 09:35 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Seymour~
Again, my friend ... again.

'She is the substance of my goal,
The other half of my soul.
She is my tower of retreat,
And is my Eden full complete.'

What a love you are ...
and what a love you have.
Beautiful to see loving emotion displayed.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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11 posted 03-22-2000 10:49 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Excellent as always Sy. . . you do have a way with words, my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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Again I enjoy the fruit of your labors, my friend  
Seymour Tabin
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Nan, Did I say there was only one apple? *L*

Denise, Thank you sweet. *L*

Wild Child, That is a very sweet comment, thank you.

Marge, Wonderful comment, I love you too. Sy

Sven, Nice to hear from you and thanks for the nice comment.

Balladeer, Just to know you read my stuff is a lift to me. Sy
hoot_owl_rn
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Seymore...ah, to be the apple of your eye must be a wonderful thing  
Meadowmuse
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Such verse of adoration
writ with poetic celebration...

...beautiful, Seymour.


 
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