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Moonshine
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0 posted 03-22-2000 12:38 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

Clouds hang low in the dull sky
Laden with emotions that pull them down
Raindrops fall as the world moves below
Forming puddles of sadness

Iced winds cut through seemingly still air
Ripping and weaving all around
Chilling everything that stands in its path
To the very core

And there I stand
Alone in the storm of nothingness
I long for the sun to come and warm me
So that my frozen soul may finally melt


[This message has been edited by Moonshine (edited 03-22-2000).]
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serenity blaze
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1 posted 03-22-2000 01:10 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

"alone in the storm of nothingness..."

I LOVED this line...nice work.  Thank you.
Dark Angel
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2 posted 03-22-2000 08:28 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Moonshine, wow this is great!!

And there I stand
Alone in the storm of nothingness.....WOW.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Moonshine
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3 posted 03-22-2000 08:50 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

I'm glad you enjoyed this piece Serenity, thanx for your lovely reply.

Moonshine.

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Thanx for your lovely reply and comment DA.

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Moonshine
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4 posted 03-22-2000 08:53 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

I'm glad you enjoyed this piece Serenity, thanx for your lovely reply.

Moonshine.

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Thanx for your lovely reply and comment DA.

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hoot_owl_rn
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"And there I stand
Alone in the storm of nothingness
I long for the sun to come and warm me
So that my frozen soul may finally melt"

Moonshine, this is a wonderful poem. The last stanza floored me  

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Well written poem. Very sad.  

Denise
Moonshine
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7 posted 03-23-2000 12:05 AM       View Profile for Moonshine   Email Moonshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonshine's Home Page   View IP for Moonshine

*picking Hoot up off the floor* lol
Thanx Hoot for your lovely reply and compliment.

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Thanx for your lovely reply and compliment Denise.

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