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Alwye
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In the space between moments


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Shadows gently stir
Voices waft and whisper
Floating, streaming, weaving
Among the grains of doubt
The wind is colored grey-
All is unsettled.

Moans are strongly purged
Draped in scarlet fear
Yearning, wanting, feeling
Needing to dissolve the pain
The sky is closing in-
The tempest is created.

Emotional inferno ensues
Lighted with chaotic flame
Licking, hissing, teasing
Watching tender life collapse
The earth strangled and torn-
Peace is savagely murdered.

Fire is slowly calmed
When droplets of regret form
Sliding, tracing, falling
Laced with darkened sadness
The air is thickly hazed-
Tears begin to flood.

Ghosts of the past cry
Eyes grow slightly chilled
Wandering, hoping, waiting
Wanting to renew again
But the wind is colored grey-
All remains unsettled.



 *Krista Knutson*

~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~


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oh, I loved this one Krista!  I loved your dark theme and especially loved the third line of each verse.  That was a big hook, it drew me in even more.  Wonderful work Krista.

 Abrahm Simons

Put one foot on the path of life and tread the dagger's path betwixt dark and light.

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Alwye~
A very, very interesting piece.
Deep and pensive.

'Draped in scarlet fear'

What a vivid phrase.
~*Marge*~


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Wild and dark, enjoyed the read!

Corinne
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Nicely done krista  
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Beautifully expressed, as always, Krista!

Denise
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Moans are strongly purged
Draped in scarlet fear
Yearning, wanting, feeling
Needing to dissolve the pain
The sky is closing in-
The tempest is created.

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Fire is slowly calmed
When droplets of regret form
Sliding, tracing, falling
Laced with darkened sadness
The air is thickly hazed-
Tears begin to flood.

Ghosts of the past cry
Eyes grow slightly chilled
Wandering, hoping, waiting
Wanting to renew again
But the wind is colored grey-
All remains unsettled.
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wow, the sharp dark imagery of this is excellent and the emotional imagery is perfection.
VERY well written...
take care, jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman


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In the space between moments


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Thank you all very much.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~


 
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