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Martie
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Look at this vibrant sky!
It has lost its shroud
that hung gray and cloaked
across back yards.

It flung it off for spring,
to see how a sky can beam
after the wind has brushed it
and torn all wayward leaves
that would be fluttering.

I can feel the ions shift
and quicken the pulse of time,
for the minute is crisp
and going is not laced
but silky with movement.

The flowers are listening
for the honey bees return
their ears cocked
their sweetness opening,
fragrant and beguiling.

Look at this vibrant sky!

I see the fragile canopy
that held my youth
tattered and failed
across the ripening grasses,
and I think this day
is for a loverís touch,
singing nonsense songs,
and screeching children
gleefully negligent
of their preciousness.

It is also a day for shedding,
and thatís what I do.
Like the snake,
this skin has grown
too old for the slither of my soul,
this ripe blossoming is wondrous
in its new and ribald glistening,
it splits the old and leaves it
like an errant leaf,

and today I will rake it up.



[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 03-21-2000).]
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1 posted 03-21-2000 07:48 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Martie, such an uplifting and spirit~filled poem...beauty in truth. Loved it.

~ Claire
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2 posted 03-21-2000 08:10 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
Only you !

'this skin has grown
to old for the slither of my soul'

~*Marge*~



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3 posted 03-21-2000 08:37 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is a wonderful portrayal of Spring/rebirth! Done only as you can do it!

Denise
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Claire--what a beautiful reply

Marge--you make me feel so special

Denise--spring and re birth is wonderful, isn't it
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Can't do anything but just smile here with this one   Rake it all in girl !!
Martie
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6 posted 03-22-2000 03:22 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Ruth, I am getting tired of all this raking....need some help!
Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 03-22-2000 04:47 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Martie,
What a beautiful spirit you have, and all your poetry is "silky with movement". I love it.
Liz
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I'm ready for spring! Oh, wait..it's been here since November! Arizona is strange..while you all are digging out, we're tanning....  
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9 posted 03-22-2000 07:33 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Martie,

you're the queen, lady, the queen!  You rule!
You Rock!

Corinne
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and how did I miss this gem...  *smile*
I could rake up your marvelous poetry all day my friend...
Martie
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Liz--and I love the you in you.

PdV--We don't exactly dig out in southern Calif. either--I do love Arizona.

Wow!  Corinne, what a wonderful reply--you rock yourself, girl!

Mike--Thanks for bringing this back up.  I needed a reminder of how sweet life is--and you.  
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12 posted 04-04-2000 01:33 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
I like it even better ...
the second time around.

One - two and then ROCK !
One - two and then ROLL !
One - two and then RAKE !
It's good for your SOUL !
~*Me*~  





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OK, Martie - You can come rake mine too - Then we're off to the beach!!
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It seems you get lots of enjoyment from raking up leaves.   James
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Gorgeous .....
You put spring in my heart today, Martie .....
RAM
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16 posted 04-04-2000 12:23 PM       View Profile for RAM   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RAM

"for the minute is crisp
and going is not laced
but silky with movement."

awesome.

yepr -- that's one rockin' rake.

Rick
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17 posted 04-04-2000 03:11 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Marge--Sometimes things are better the second time around.

Nan--you gotta do your own raking, but the beach would be great!

James--those internal leaves are the hardest to find, but they rake up great!

Hi Shannon--so glad to see you here! Glad I brought you some sunshine.

Rick--what an awesome word is awesome.
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18 posted 04-04-2000 03:56 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I like this very much, Martie!!! (C'mon over and pull some weeds when you finish raking! *G*)
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19 posted 04-05-2000 03:00 AM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Beautiful!  Just beautiful!  Sigh.  You keep on writing more and more lovely things - this is one of the many I wish I had written.  So much feeling, and such exquisite analogies.
The last verse is my favorite, and then, you pick an ending line that wraps it all up perfectly.  Bravo!



 ...Living is ever like crossing rivers; finding a new life on each shore ... RJG


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suthern--I'm on my way

Rosemary--A compliment from you, gracious poet friend, is wonderful, a bravo, makes my day.
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