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~The Things They Cant See~

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 03-21-2000 05:25 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

~The Things They Cant See~


She has everything I want and she's all I'll never be,
and she takes it all for granted while I stand jaded in my envy.

What makes her so blind, there is so much of you she cant see,
I'd die to know this subtle sensuality and to make your discoveries.

I see your situation and the place she keeps you in,
in this game of pain ... neither heart will win.

Don't misunderstand me ... you don't have to explain or confess,
I understand completely ... you see I'm living in the same distress.

But I'm not without compassion, I have been in her place,
sometimes shadows follow us, memories time cant erase.

Still I find my consolation in the losses of her circumstance,
loneliness and longing creates the need for temporary romance.

Momentary distractions give brief comfort and aid,
I'm trying not to feel guilty ... they didn't keep the promises made.

You see in me ... what she cant see in you,
these things we have in common, are what divides lives in two.

The rule "we only want what we don't have" ... seems to be true,
all I want ... is for them to see in us -- all the things I see in you.

I know there are two sides to every story ... something to defend,
but all I ever wanted was a lover who would still be my friend.

She has everything I want, and she is all I'll never be ...
with the exception perhaps, of eyes that receive.

He was all I ever wanted ... yet he looks right thru me,
all my gains and losses are found in the things they cant see.

janet marie



 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman


© Copyright 2000 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
endoftheriver
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1 posted 03-21-2000 06:04 PM       View Profile for endoftheriver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for endoftheriver

we only get to keep what we take care of?
serenity blaze
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2 posted 03-21-2000 06:15 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Janet Marie, you've done it again!  Thanks.
Marina
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3 posted 03-21-2000 06:45 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Well done Janet!  This is unfortunitly "the same old story" for so many people we care about or happen to cross in life. Very nicely written.

Marina
hoot_owl_rn
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WOw Janet, this is a powerful piece and one that speaks deeply to me. Nice job  
Butterflies_dont_cry
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5 posted 03-21-2000 11:24 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

She has everything I want, and she is all I'll never be ...with the exception perhaps, of eyes that receive.

He was all I ever wanted ... yet he looks right thru me,all my gains and losses are found in the things they cant see.

So powerful and so very.....REAL.  You once again touch on feelings that elude my own words and touch my heart.  
What a gift you have to capture it all in one place.  
**AWH's sister of my soul***


 Whatever strength I add to myself becomes my greatest weakness, while whatever weakness I'll consciously endure will be replaced with a strength that is not my own.
G. Finley

JamesMichael
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6 posted 03-22-2000 05:21 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very nice Janet..."but all I ever wanted was a lover who would still be my friend."  And I'll go one more...the second thing I wanted was a friend to be my lover.   James
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7 posted 03-22-2000 07:17 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Janet Marie~
Really a pensive piece from you.

'sometimes shadows follow us,
memories time cant erase'

'I know there are two sides
to every story ... '

Understanding *hugs*
~*Marge*~


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Enola
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Still I find my consolation in the losses of her circumstance,
loneliness and longing creates the need for temporary romance.

Are you telepathic?  I've experienced this many times.  I completely indentify with this poem, it's so thruthful.  And excellently written.


 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
Aimster
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9 posted 03-31-2000 11:50 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

-Janet-

found another one i can so relate to!


You see in me ... what she cant see in you,
these things we have in common, are what divides lives in two.

The rule "we only want what we don't have" ... seems to be true,
all I want ... is for them to see in us -- all the things I see in you.

I know there are two sides to every story ... something to defend,
but all I ever wanted was a lover who would still be my friend.

Your entire poem was wonderful and really spoke to me...but these three stanzas right here captured it all! It would be so wonderful if we could have a lover and friend all together. Thanks for sharing this..made me ponder about life for a while.

Amy  




 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
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10 posted 04-01-2000 12:00 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Janet Marie, you've certainly struck a chord in many people with this poem...that is the mark of a good poet. Nicely done, Miss.
 
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