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A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart


0 posted 03-21-2000 04:21 PM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for A Romantic Heart

As the morning dew arises,
I look upon your face in your slumbers sleep,

Awakened I am as my heart stirs,
With whispes of your love flowing through my veins,

I have found light into the darkness,
Depths of love that has been asleep,

Now as I look upon you,
As your gaze is glass,

I am smothered by your thoughts,
Your eyes capture mine,

This dance our eyes capture,
Is our love,
Love awakened, Love tis true,

What is real before our eyes,
Tricks does our hearts play to our minds,

As I watch you sleep,
I am in love with your innocence,
Soft breathing, eyes closed,

Dreams you are dreaming,
And I am in love with you once more!


 "Love is not love
Which alters when it alteration finds,
Or bends with the remover to remove.
O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare

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endoftheriver
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1 posted 03-21-2000 06:26 PM       View Profile for endoftheriver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for endoftheriver

pleasant thoughts, first lines dont quite seem to flow to me, try reading it aloud? i think fewer words and a little more direct would work better..

------------------//
Awake, and my heart stirs to see
slumberous dreams still shadowing
your face.
Love whispering through our veins,
arising like the morning dew...//?


Danny Holloway
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2 posted 03-22-2000 06:35 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

"and I am in love with you once more"
Very nice.  That's as good as it gets, I think.

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.
David2
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3 posted 03-22-2000 08:00 PM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

A Romantic Heart,
    Obviously, I am new to this, but the words you use to describe your feelings and your love seem so heartfelt. If your work is indicative in anyway of the caliber of the poetry that is submitted, then I am sorry I took so long to find this site. Thanks for some truly beautiful thoughts.
                 DAvid2
A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart


4 posted 03-22-2000 08:24 PM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

End:well I thought this was OPEN poetry...gee, for a minute I thought I posted in the CRITICAL FORUM....

I wrote this as it came from my heart watching my muse sleep.....so I feel it is fine as is...

Danny: You are so sweet...thanks! LOL as good as it gets!....maybe, wait and see!

David: WELCOME to passions!!!! I sir, am humbled by your gracious comments...
Too sweet...Yes all my poetry comes from my heart!


 "Love is not love
Which alters when it alteration finds,
Or bends with the remover to remove.
O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare

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