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Somebody Loved them Tisha

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Local Rebel
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Somebody loved them Tisha

A casting call
To queens would be
Of splendor painted pageants
Gowned and crowned
Libations budding
In southern bells carillons
Star eyed girls
Ringing whet anticipation

Pick me, Pick me

Each flower bloomed and
Bloomered in chiffon
tender sprouts displayed
for all to ravish

Somebody loved them Tisha

You took them

The ones who stumbled slightly
In their pink innocence

You took them

Told them they were slightly flawed
But with your help
They could be the sovereigns
Of a bigger prize
With just a tad
Of your precious
Magic coaching
And your extra edge
Of confidence

You took them

Then you showed them
Bigger sky's with stars
Brighter than the countryside
And men with power
And glory could be
So
Generously grateful
For small favors
Little favors
Savored between youthful
Thighs and
It was just one time

One night

Who would know?

Somebody loved them Tisha Bleu

Like your husband
Who showed them the second
Came
Easier than the first time
And a little more
Confidence made it all
A pretty party
A cumming out of
Sorts

Your own daughter Tisha,
A slender slice of
Cheesecake at only
Twelve you dressed her
In a scandalously skimpy
Leotard to show how fair
Her fairness at
The county fairs
As she tumbled and tossed
And twisted for
Senators and Bankers,
Lawyers, and Aldermen
She spun the mat
Spun their heads
As you collected
Bids

Somebody loved her Tisha

Even the rat he was
Drowning in the backyard pool
The stubborn madam
Wouldn't let such

sentiment Stand
in her way

Somebody loved them all Tisha Bleu
Somebody

Not you




 Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran
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devina
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1 posted 03-21-2000 03:38 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This was deep, movingly powerful- YOU ROCK!!!! I read much on this...very wicked is the way of some...you've brought this to life...

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

LoveBug
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2 posted 03-21-2000 03:50 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Wow,this is a very powerful piece of work! Keep it up!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
Martie
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This is powerful writing...and hurt to read.  

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Local Rebel
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4 posted 03-21-2000 06:49 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Thanks all... very much...

a true story I'm afraid...

as a poem though -- I think I need to tweak it some...

Thanks again
hoot_owl_rn
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Geesh Rebel....I have always been a big fan of your work, but man, you blew me away with this one. Excellent piece of writing here Sir  
devina
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6 posted 03-21-2000 11:39 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Don't you dare tweak this one!!!! I like it just the way it stands...
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7 posted 03-21-2000 11:43 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Rebel~
Powerfully you have dredged emotions with this poem.  The story had to be a tough one to deal with ... but deal with it you did !
It will be interesting to see what
you tweak.
~*Marge*~


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Local Rebel
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8 posted 03-22-2000 04:03 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

I guess what I'd consider tough to deal with was living in a town where almost everybody knew this and nobody did anything... and I was one of the nobodies... but, twas long, long, ago... I'm sure nothing like that goes on now.. (yeah right)

thanks for the read all...!! and the compliments
Nicole
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Great jumpin' day Guy, you're good!  I read this yesterday, and sat there with a reply...backspace (too trite)...reply...backspace (too trite)...reply...
Eventually gave up, since I couldn't think of anything that wouldn't sound horridly trite.  Saw it again today, and ugh!  It actually made me mad, carried more impact on the second and third read.  An excellent poem about a brutal subject, you've created here.
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10 posted 03-22-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Wow!!! 'Bout knocked me over with this one!! It's so sad and it makes me angry!! Wonderfully written and I wouldn't change a thing. Packs a lot just as it is!! Really does make one think.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~GOOD~Work~~~~~~~~~~~~
Nan
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The intensity of this work demands a multitude of readings, LR... I like it when a poet does tnat to me... You're quite versatile, my friend
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13 posted 03-22-2000 08:00 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

My name was ....

HUSG

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