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The Effect of Deep Affection

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AndreaA02
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"The Effect of Deep Affection"

The worst of thoughts race through my head
On the outside everything seems alright
But on the inside a part of me is dead
Who ever knew love could effect me so much?
I find myself trying to remember your voice
And I'm forever lingering for your touch

"Worthless" is a new name you've given my feelings
It's quite clear that I come around every few days
   only to impose on your dealings
On your side of all this confusion there's no      
  comprehension
If ever I were to go back to you
Our love would be a contradiction
"Our love"?
Yes, I know it's a lie
I still remember when the truth became all too clear
You wouldn't even hold me as I started to breakdown
  and cry

Now it's been a while since we last met
Still my heart hold so much love, hurt, and regret
I know you see me standing in the threshold of your
  home
And there's no mistaking that look in your eyes;
You'd rather be alone
Your phone rings and there's no hesitation or shame
I only hope she's aware of what I now know...
With all the great feelings of being loved and  
  wanted...
Soon will come an overwhelming amount of pain

By Andrea Aguirre


[This message has been edited by AndreaA02 (edited 03-21-2000).]
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mete out
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1 posted 03-21-2000 05:01 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Andrea,
I know this feeling well...of loss and of hurrt, but believe me, it WILL pass...
Welcome to Passions, you will be looked after here by all.
A fantastically emotional first post.    


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

JamesMichael
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2 posted 03-21-2000 05:19 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very enjoyable to read...especially liked.."Worthless" is a new name you've given my feelings" and "Now its been a while since we last met..Still my heart holds so much love, hurt, and regret."  That is a fantastic line.   James
devina
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3 posted 03-21-2000 05:38 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

We only learn from our mistakes...welcome to the family....

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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Andrea~    
Enjoy the hearts that live here.
We welcome you with open arms.
~*Marge*~


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Nan
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None of us is immune to the effects of love... You say it well, Andrea - Welcome to Passions.  Check your email for a special greeting..
Denise
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6 posted 03-21-2000 02:09 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Welcome to Passions, Andrea! This is an excellent expression of your feelings. Well done!

Denise
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I love those lines... "And there's no mistaking that look in your eyes, you'd rather be alone" and "I still remember when the truth became all too clear, you wouldn't even hold me as I started to break down and cry".
    So descriptive... reminds me all too much of the last relationship I was in... sad, but you'll get through it!     And welcome to Passions!  We'll support ya and help ya out if you need anything!     Thanks for sharing your poem!
-molly aka sam

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"Thus shall ye think of all this fleeting world:
A star at dawn, a bubble in a stream;
A flash of lightning in a summer cloud,
A flickering lamp, a phantom, and a dream."
-from the Diamond Sutra, translated by : A. F. Price -- found in Teachings of The Buddha, edited by Jack Kornfield


AndreaA02
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8 posted 03-21-2000 03:55 PM       View Profile for AndreaA02   Email AndreaA02   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AndreaA02

Much appreciation to all that have left a response. I have never let anyone read my poetry and I am thrilled to see that there are people that enjoy it. I was afraid that maybe I didn't have the talent to write. Now I see that when words truly come from the heart, they can never go wrong. Thank you all for leading me to this conclusion.

~Andrea
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Welcome to passions  
Lone Wolf
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10 posted 03-21-2000 08:47 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Andrea,
Welcome to Passions...a haven for the weary.  Excellent poem...I agree with James, fantastic line.  Wow.

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
Danny Holloway
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11 posted 03-24-2000 10:34 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Very nice first poem.  I agree with other comments made about the impact of some of the lines.  Good rhyme also.
I commented on your second poem also.
Welcome.

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.
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12 posted 03-24-2000 06:49 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Welcome to the family! A lot of sad feeling in this one......  
Corinne
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13 posted 03-24-2000 08:16 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

This person doesn't deserve you, remember that!

Nice poem, too, and welcome to passions!

Corinne
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