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Sven
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0 posted 2000-03-21 12:53 PM


Lady of my heart
Where do I start?
You are the part
Your love the art

Show me the sky
Teach me to fly
Take me so high
Our love the tie

My love for you
Not old, quite new
Fills my heart too
As love can do

Our love this night
Casts a bright light
Your eyes, my sight
Just feels so right

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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devina
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1 posted 2000-03-21 12:58 PM


Very lovingly put Sven...simple love is always the best of all...

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


Marina
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2 posted 2000-03-21 01:00 AM


I really like your shorter version and your rhyme sceme here Sven.  Simply and well put.

Marina

Windrider Silverbreeze
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3 posted 2000-03-21 02:19 AM




very well written.

Simplicity is sometimes the easiest way to express things


Lone Wolf
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4 posted 2000-03-21 08:02 PM


Simple, yet wonderfully put.  Love in the most basic form, Sven.  Well done.

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Isis
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5 posted 2000-03-21 08:48 PM


Short and sweet, yet speaks volumes of emotion and yearning.  Well done  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
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hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 2000-03-21 09:30 PM


Short and sweet  
Sven
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7 posted 2000-03-21 10:30 PM


Thank you all my friends. . . sometimes simple is the way to go. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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