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RobertB
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since 1999-09-26
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Champaign, IL

0 posted 2000-03-20 08:29 PM


Mother Poetry

A vamp with one too many
syllables choked out bulging
eyeballs blind to the implication
of art in words free for the thinking
men lured by women undressed
from emotions left staring
at children hungry with bloated stomachs
crying for a mother’s love….
and she has none.

Robert

© Copyright 2000 RobertB - All Rights Reserved
Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
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Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2000-03-20 08:37 PM


You always give me a whole new way of looking at things Robert. I like someone who makes me think.   Well done.
childomine
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since 2000-01-25
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st. petersburg, FL
2 posted 2000-03-20 08:39 PM


An awesome poem.  Very "deep".

 ...Give me the strength to walk the soft earth, a relative to all that is!...
Black Eagle
Oglala Sioux holy man



Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
3 posted 2000-03-20 08:43 PM


always love to read your stuff, Robert!

Corinne

Denise
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4 posted 2000-03-20 09:15 PM


Wow! Short, powerful and to the point, as always! Excellent Robert! Glad to see you posting again!  

Denise

RobertB
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Champaign, IL
5 posted 2000-03-20 10:31 PM


Thanks you guys!!! Makes me feel like I still have it!!


WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
6 posted 2000-03-20 11:17 PM


You still got it! You have a way of opening up people's minds with your poetry! Way to go!
serenity blaze
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7 posted 2000-03-20 11:33 PM


Owee, RobertB!  I like...very much.


Meadowmuse
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8 posted 2000-03-21 12:08 PM


I've not been reading your work long, but to my mind, ya never LOST it! This one is powerful in its imagery, maintaining that sense of discomfiture that your work often houses...that "edge." Good writing, Robert.  

~ Claire

RobertB
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Champaign, IL
9 posted 2000-03-21 07:07 AM


I am honored to be critiqued by my peers. Thank you for inspiring me to be inspired!!


hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
10 posted 2000-03-22 11:16 AM


Wow, Robert, this one says so much in so few words!!

 There are only two ages of people...living and dead and you all look about the right age to me :)

RobertB
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since 1999-09-26
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Champaign, IL
11 posted 2000-03-22 09:51 PM


Thanks Ruth!!! But then you know me.....I always use few words!
Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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Pennsylvania
12 posted 2000-03-23 04:52 AM


A unique poem
A unique mind
Thank you
Liz

RobertB
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Champaign, IL
13 posted 2000-03-23 07:24 AM


no...thank you "Lizabeth....without readers poetry is like one hand clapping... or like thunder with no lightning or clouds with no rain.....or spring without flowers.. or or or or......
David2
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since 2000-03-22
Posts 407

14 posted 2000-03-23 10:25 AM


Robert,
   This is the first piece of your work I have read, I am looking forward to more. It is very tightly woven which makes it especially easy to digest. Thanks.
  David2

Tess
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since 2000-03-22
Posts 288
Australia
15 posted 2000-03-23 10:44 AM


Oh I love this style of poem..one where the immediate meaning is sometimes unclear and it requires re-reading several times ...it's like you slowly peel back the layers exposing the poems core....food for the mind

Just wish I could write this stuff..but i've tried and I can't seem to make it work  

Ahh well..I'll just have to content myself with my sweet sappy stuff and read yours to satisfy that niggle!

Tess

 "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two
bodies."
-Aristotle


RobertB
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Posts 1104
Champaign, IL
16 posted 2000-03-24 08:07 AM


Thanks David and Tess I look forward to reading your poetry also!!

To each his own Tess....is what I have always heard. I tried other poetry..... I mean styles and it is like work..... I have a job already...I don't need two. So, I make it fun, poetry that is.......it should be fun!!

Robert

Nan
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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
17 posted 2000-03-24 04:07 PM


Succinct and profound, my friend....
RobertB
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Posts 1104
Champaign, IL
18 posted 2000-03-24 08:08 PM


The "S" word again Nan!!!! Boy, I just gotta look that one up!!! hehehehehe

 if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.



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