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Rain Tonight

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PoeticKnight
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0 posted 03-20-2000 04:59 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PoeticKnight

The realization comes slowly
That I donít know what is real
I donít know what I want
Donít know what I feel
The weight is heavy upon me
Holding onto a sinking stone
With the knowledge
That inside, we are all alone
And in order to be healed
We have to stand in rain
In order to pay our penance
We have to endure the pain

The water washes over me
Washing me clean
I am starting out fresh again
Somewhere in the in-between
Until I feel the need again
Moving from left to right,
I feel the need to be cleaned
By the rain tonight

© Copyright 2000 J.M. Landry - All Rights Reserved
poetFemmeFatale
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1 posted 03-20-2000 05:09 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

This is a really nice piece too...I like your sense of confusion in the first few lines...that sets the whole mood very well.  Anytime my life gets too chaotic or scrambled, I too go out in the rain...it's there I find my peace - my calm - almost like a cleansing as you spoke of.  A fresh new start when my mind is cleared.  Something about the rain....it is indeed what you shared here.  Thank you for this refreshing piece, I enjoyed it!     Also glad to know I'm not the only one who runs out into the rain when I'm feeling lost.....I find most of my own answers there.
PoeticKnight
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2 posted 03-20-2000 05:13 PM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

Thanks, PFF....every now and then you have to strip naked and walk in the rain....
Rosalind Palafox
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3 posted 03-20-2000 07:56 PM       Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Rosalind Palafox

You know the other day it rained and I felt the same way. I went outside feeling all the anguish and pain. Then I closed my eyes and "cleansed" myself with the rain.  It really felt like it did cleanse me.......

 "Love knows hidden paths."-German proverb
Janet Marie
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4 posted 03-20-2000 08:14 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

oh let it rain...
let it rain...
let it rain...on me  

love this one...much...very full of your deep thoughts,
stalking you in the rain...
your jm


 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman


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5 posted 03-20-2000 11:09 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

"The weight is heavy upon me
Holding onto a sinking stone"

"I feel the need to be cleaned
By the rain tonight"

The flow (sorry) of this piece is aflood (oops) with a tactile, sensual feel...the message both emotional and cerebral. So nicely written.  

~ Claire (sorry about the bad puns)
PoeticKnight
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6 posted 03-21-2000 09:07 AM       View Profile for PoeticKnight   Email PoeticKnight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoeticKnight

Thanks rosalind, jm, and claire...the puns were funny. *L*
christies heart
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7 posted 03-21-2000 09:20 AM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christies heart

Very nice. I love the way rain does lend to such mixed feelings. sleeping and being emotionally cleased!

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 03-21-2000 10:37 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I just happen to love the rain and poetry about the rain even more  
Corinne
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9 posted 03-21-2000 10:45 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Lovely.  The cleansing waters, like birth.

Corinne
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