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Rain Tonight
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Rain Tonight |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
The realization comes slowly That I don’t know what is real I don’t know what I want Don’t know what I feel The weight is heavy upon me Holding onto a sinking stone With the knowledge That inside, we are all alone And in order to be healed We have to stand in rain In order to pay our penance We have to endure the pain The water washes over me Washing me clean I am starting out fresh again Somewhere in the in-between Until I feel the need again Moving from left to right, I feel the need to be cleaned By the rain tonight |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
This is a really nice piece too...I like your sense of confusion in the first few lines...that sets the whole mood very well. Anytime my life gets too chaotic or scrambled, I too go out in the rain...it's there I find my peace - my calm - almost like a cleansing as you spoke of. A fresh new start when my mind is cleared. Something about the rain....it is indeed what you shared here. Thank you for this refreshing piece, I enjoyed it!  Also glad to know I'm not the only one who runs out into the rain when I'm feeling lost.....I find most of my own answers there. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks, PFF....every now and then you have to strip naked and walk in the rain.... |
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Rosalind Palafox
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MemberPosts 88 |
You know the other day it rained and I felt the same way. I went outside feeling all the anguish and pain. Then I closed my eyes and "cleansed" myself with the rain. It really felt like it did cleanse me....... "Love knows hidden paths."-German proverb |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh let it rain... let it rain... let it rain...on me love this one...much...very full of your deep thoughts, stalking you in the rain... your jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"The weight is heavy upon me Holding onto a sinking stone" "I feel the need to be cleaned By the rain tonight" The flow (sorry) of this piece is aflood (oops) with a tactile, sensual feel...the message both emotional and cerebral. So nicely written.  ~ Claire (sorry about the bad puns) |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks rosalind, jm, and claire...the puns were funny. *L* |
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christies heart Member
since 1999-08-10
Posts 189NJ, USA |
Very nice. I love the way rain does lend to such mixed feelings. sleeping and being emotionally cleased! Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians Native American prayer |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I just happen to love the rain and poetry about the rain even more |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely. The cleansing waters, like birth. Corinne |
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