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Who's The Victor After All?

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hoot_owl_rn
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Whoís The Victor After All?

Tighten up the armor
Man the battle ships
Last night I felt some weakness
When you softly kissed my lips


Quickly hoist the battle flags
Call the high command
My best reserves were tested
When you reached out for my hand


The combat now has just begun
I cautiously proceed
I wonít give up in this, loveís fight
Iím not ready to concede


Feel the sear of my best shots
Hear my cannons roar
Damn your persistent knocking
Here on my cold heartís door


Bayonets held at full charge
Iím giving it my all
Three simple words spoke from your lips
And watch how quick I fall


Iím feeling dazed and wounded
Thick smoke begins to clear
I dare to open up my eyes
And see you standing near


My armor crashes to the ground
Defenses all are lost
Now you can claim your victory
I wonder, what the cost?


White flag of yield Iím grasping
Can you feel my fear?
Whatís this?
You take it from my hands
And raise it in the air



†The poet's job is to put into words those feelings we all have that are so deep, so important, and yet so difficult to name, to tell the truth in such a beautiful way that people cannot live without it. ~Jane Kenyon

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 03-20-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 03-20-2000 12:27 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Ruth, You have done it again, what a masterpiece a poem that can be read three different ways, your amazing to say the least.
Danny Holloway
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2 posted 03-20-2000 12:53 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

No combat here, only surrender to your soft sweet charms.
Very nice indeed!
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3 posted 03-20-2000 01:19 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Oh, Hoot~
This is powerful in it's surrender.
What a beautiful piece.
Gal, you've set the surrender in motion.
~*Marge*~


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Marilyn
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4 posted 03-20-2000 01:40 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Wow Ruth. Powerful piece this. Surrender doesn't have to be so frightening and it can be the best thing we ever did for ourselves.  
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5 posted 03-20-2000 03:20 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is absolutely breathtaking! This is my favorite of yours to date, Ruth! The last line is brilliant, mutual surrender, nothing better than that!  

Denise
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6 posted 03-20-2000 04:00 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Hoot Owl this is brilliant and lovely.  James
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7 posted 03-20-2000 04:07 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh Ruth, this is so very beautiful, and so beautifully written.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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Ruth, Strong, yet fragile and definately excellent!!
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9 posted 03-20-2000 06:54 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Ruth: Here's hoping this one goes through..

Beautifully said..

HUSG
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It's amazing what one simple kiss can do to you, isn't it, hoot??..

Very nice work, my friend..
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This is both powerful and beautiful, Ruth .....
The best kind of surrender ... to love .....  
RobertB
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12 posted 03-20-2000 08:32 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

Excellent Ruth......
hoot_owl_rn
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Thanks everyone for reading and for your gracious comments  
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What a terrific construction of a great idea! Good writing, Ruth   You know, they say the victor is the one left standing but, in this case, the opposite may be true  
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15 posted 03-20-2000 09:52 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Excellent work Ruth, I loved the shift between the battle and the love you made each stanza, illustrates a wonderful picture.
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Damn girl this was FANTASTIC! One of my favoties next to your armour one!  Boy can I relate to how you feel here.  Try as ya might to hold that armour in place, those dang sentimental things seem to leak through!
Excellence my dear friend! Two thumbs up!!!!
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This is SO good, 'hoot'.  surpassed yourself with this one, and that is not easy to do if you are you...My special book is getting quite full...Again, LOVELY.
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Sounds as if you got the best out of surrender Ruth...keep sailing...
hoot_owl_rn
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I just can't thak everyone enough for the overwhelming positive response to this one. Thank you  
Corinne
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Definitely one of your best, Hoot!

And, nice to see this happy side of you,
heck, surrender, you might lose the battle, but you'll win the war!

Corinne
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Hoot,
You never cease to amaze me. Great writing. *L*
Elizabeth Santos
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Enjoyed this from beginning to end, a smile with each new verse, and then that tremendous ending. Wonderful, Ruth. I don't really have words.
Liz
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This is wonderful!  I love the war/love scenes in each paragraph!  
-molly aka sam

 Fleeting World
"Thus shall ye think of all this fleeting world:
A star at dawn, a bubble in a stream;
A flash of lightning in a summer cloud,
A flickering lamp, a phantom, and a dream."
-from the Diamond Sutra, translated by : A. F. Price -- found in Teachings of The Buddha, edited by Jack Kornfield


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Thank you everyone  
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