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Something Like Panic

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christies heart
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0 posted 03-20-2000 06:12 AM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for christies heart

There is a never ending forcast of doom.
It circles around us,
silently reminding us that every day
may be our last,
That the road we travel is certainly lonely,
deceptively vast.

When I am sent on a shadowed detour
in moments like this,
through the damp, winding roads of a park,
with the same cars surrounding me all the time,
that I remember, in somber fright,
where it all began.



 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


© Copyright 2000 Christine R - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
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1 posted 03-20-2000 12:58 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

This is interesting.  "Shadowed detour" is a dark imagery for sure.  Left me hanging though, "where it all began".
Janet Marie
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2 posted 03-20-2000 07:55 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

very deep poem chris, I like how cryptic it is...a definate "read between the lines" kind of poem, my fav kniod too  ...great work take care, jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman


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3 posted 03-20-2000 11:27 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Chris, I am so curious about this poem...I like the sound of the writing, but I'm not sure I understand its meaning. Would love to know more about your inspiration for this piece if you'd care to share it.  

~ Claire
christies heart
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4 posted 03-21-2000 09:16 AM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christies heart

To all who replied...I had to laugh at the questions regarding the meaning of this poem. I had to change it around from its first form because it made no sense then! I wrote it a few years ago when I was stuck in a thunderstorm and sent down a long detour through a state park. The cars were practically stopped (or how else could I write ) and the wheater was so bad that began to feel very claustrophobic and almost panicky at the fact that there was really no way out. Feeling "stuck" in my car made me think about how we all have the illlusion of being in control in are lives....I tend to avoid driving in thunderstorms!

  




 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


hoot_owl_rn
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Thanks for the explanation  
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