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Into the Darkness(Inspired by wayoutwalt)

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Mistikman
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0 posted 03-20-2000 03:44 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mistikman

Into the darkness I walk with head held high
That horrible place where hope goes to die
Devoid of all that is good and right
A world that is bathed in eternal night

The path to this land is paved with sorrow
The kind that blocks sight of tomorrow
Riding on the horse named depression
Traveling like a funeral procession

This is a trip never made by choice
A trip for those who had no voice
Those who obey and do as they are told
Now I make the journey, alone and cold

Demons of hate and anger prey on the weak
This is not a place for the fragile or meek
To travel here, you must have wits about you
Without them, you shalt never make it through

Of this land there are only two ways out
One is redemption for those without doubt
The other is a grave one indeed
Suicide, for those who choose to bleed

I shall make it through, for I am strong
The trip is dangerous, and the path is long
But once before, I traveled this land
And its tortures I can surely withstand

© Copyright 2000 Travis Welton - All Rights Reserved
christies heart
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1 posted 03-20-2000 05:33 AM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christies heart

Very well done. I can relate to and feel the emotions in this.

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


Mistikman
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2 posted 03-20-2000 09:19 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

christies heart- Well thank you, heh, at least someone liked this  
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3 posted 03-20-2000 09:34 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Make it two, mistik. This is excellent writing. I really enjoy the way you weave the phrases together...although I'm not sure I'd want to be the inspiration for it. Poor Walt!
Denise
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4 posted 03-20-2000 09:57 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent writing! This is wonderful! Very well done!

Denise
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5 posted 03-20-2000 10:11 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

The dark side...very well written! Sounds a cold and lonely road, you've described with excellence!
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6 posted 03-20-2000 11:30 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

My young friend, this is one of your best! Very good writing!  
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7 posted 03-21-2000 01:33 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

o boo hoo woe is me im depressed nononono yuhuyuhy heheh mistik requested my repost o in to the darkness which made me feel top o the world and look how great he did on his version (jealous)  
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8 posted 03-21-2000 11:04 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I really enjoyed the way you wrote this one. Nice job  
Michael
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9 posted 03-21-2000 01:15 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

I agree with much of the sentiment in this poem.  I know the feeling behind it all too well.  I must say that suicide is the only "eternal darkness" though.  That should never even be considered an option in my book, lest you carry your pain with you forever.  Excellent portrayel of the path of Darkness I see you trod, though.  Good job.


Michael
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10 posted 03-21-2000 03:32 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

This is a wonderful poem! Keep up the good work!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
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11 posted 03-21-2000 06:41 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Balladeer- Heh, thanks   The idea for this was from the title of the poem walt recently reposted  

Denise- Why thank you  

WhtDove- The coldest and lonliest I have ever traversed, for sure. Thanks.


Poet deVine- Thanks, I think so too  

hoot_owl_rn- Thanks.

Michael- Well, I meant that the land of darkness is eternal night, when you leave it, you are no longer in it, but the world still exists, even if hidden away, for me at least. Suicide isnt really a choice any more than giving up is a choice. The choice to bleed is not one that someone would intentionally make, it is one made out of desperation to end the horrible trek. Thanks for the response, and I hope I cleared up a few of my meanings in this poem  

LoveBug- Thank you, I will  
Christopher
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12 posted 03-21-2000 10:34 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Your inspiration serves you well. Darkness is a concept I'm wholly familiar with. You've done much here to capture some of its essence!
 
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