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My sister's way

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LoveBug
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0 posted 03-18-2000 06:18 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LoveBug

Ok, I'm going to an acedemic competition tomarrow and Monday that my sister won for my school all 4 years she was in H.S., so that's what the "competition" is. As for this NOT being free-form, I decided to give stuctured poetry another try... so, here's my attempt.


Tomorrow, I go to competition
Deja vu, theyíll say
Because Iím doing what my sister did
Iím going my sister's way

I didnít exactly mean to
But it happened anyway
Pressure from everyone I know
Sent me down my sisterís way

Although some ways she has are good
Some arenít nice, they say
But, right or wrong, good or bad
Iím stuck on my sisterís way

For once, Iíd like to make it clear
That Iím ERICA, not Jenny
But thereís just too many things we share
People just nod and say, ďI see...Ē

We have too much in common, her and I
For people to tell us apart
From our writing to intelligence
Each comparison breaks my heart

Maybe someone will tell us apart
But, until that day
Iíll still be going full speed
Down my sisterís way


†"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde



[This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 03-18-2000).]
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1 posted 03-18-2000 06:34 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

great poem Lovebug   You should write more structured poetry.
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2 posted 03-18-2000 07:22 PM       View Profile for INclan   Email INclan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for INclan

That you have talent is beyond question.
Best of luck in competition.
Presently I have no suggestion,
Except to encourage you on your mission.
Your sister can not fill YOUR position.

INclan
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3 posted 03-18-2000 07:52 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Little LoveBug~
Ahhhh !  One of those sibling things !
You did a wonderful job on this.
No matter how fierce the competition ..
you'll always be a winner in the hearts
of your Passion's friends.
(and I'll bet lots of others too)

You must have a nice sister,
to have marked a path so clear.
Just one way of keeping you close
and in her heart so dear.

Structured suits you nicely.
So does falling free !
Whatever form you choose
suits me to a tee !
~*Marge*~



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4 posted 03-18-2000 07:55 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Love bug, this is great! Just read this at the competition and you'll win, hands down!
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5 posted 03-18-2000 08:03 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very nice writing...nothing wrong with going down the same rode with someone that appears to be a fantastic role model...someone to be admired.
James
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Lovebug's going to competition
That I know for sure
But in the end, you are yourself
And no one keeps the score

You think that you are walking in
The footsteps Jenny made
But no one walked your footsteps
Or paid debts that you have paid

No one writes your poetry
Or thinks the thoughts you do
You have a heart, a mind, a soul
That just belongs to you

And no one has your talent
And it is a gift so rare
It is a true ability
Of which we're all aware

Lovebug's going to competition
But this is what I see
The only thing you need to live
Is the truth you know to be

You are a wonder
Love
Liz
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7 posted 03-18-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is wonderful LoveBug! Good luck at competition!  

Denise
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8 posted 03-18-2000 10:58 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Thank you all so much for sending me off with a smile on my face...  

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
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