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Fallen Heart (any title suggestions would be appreciated)

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Marilyn
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0 posted 03-18-2000 10:02 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marilyn

I sit here in rapt fascination,
At a fallen heart's one inclination.
To hold on to fear,
When another draws near,
Showing love in minutest degree.

Once bitten twice shy, so they say.
We live it, each our own way.
But finding true love,
Is a gift from above,
Will it find you or just pass you by?

If you can't face the chance you must take,
Because once you had made a mistake.
The love that is true,
Will be lost from your view.
There in, lies the worst wounding blow                  
© Copyright 2000 Marilyn - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 03-18-2000 11:59 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

It must be a tough spot to be in. You have expressed that well in this piece! I'm not sure of a title. If I can come up with something I'll let you know!

Denise
Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 03-18-2000 12:10 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

How about

"Life's Greatest Mistake"
"To Face True Love"
"Face Love, Embrace Love"
"In the Face of Love"
"Don't Lose the Best"
"Undeniable"

Oh, well. I tried. Whatever the title, the poem is great!
Liz
Danny Holloway
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3 posted 03-18-2000 12:20 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

"Love's Second Chance"

        Love is lovlier
    the second time around
       just as wonderful
  with both feet on the ground

      its that second time
  you hear your love song sung,
makes you think, that love like youth
     is wasted on the young,

      Loves more comfortable,
     the second time you fall,
       like a friendly home,
     the second time you call,

    there are those who'll bet
    love comes but once and yet,
     you'll be so glad you met
     on the second time around.

lyrics from "Second Time Around".


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Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 03-18-2000 12:29 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Danny, Perfect title, "Love's Second Chance"
Liz
Nan
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5 posted 03-18-2000 12:39 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I love your message here, Marilyn...
We just can't go through life blaming the next for the shortcomings of the previous, ya know?... and so many do..
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6 posted 03-18-2000 02:29 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Marilyn~
Lovely thoughts you've penned.
I like it very much.
Borrowing from Danny's idea ...
I would suggest 'Second Time Around'
~*Marge*~


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JamesMichael
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7 posted 03-18-2000 07:59 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Marilyn I think a nice title would be one of the following although you already have a title now called Fallen Heart.  But anyway:
A chance, take a chance, Love's chance, A chance to Love.  Very close to Dannys idea.  James
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8 posted 03-18-2000 08:08 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

It's a wonderful poem, Marilyn. How about "Wipe the slate clean"?

or "double exposure"
WhtDove
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9 posted 03-18-2000 11:44 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Love that song Once bitten twice shy baby....
Great poem Marilyn...though I like the title's offered and couldn't give ya one for this...sorry.
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10 posted 03-19-2000 09:51 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Marilyn, I can totally relate to this as you know. I rather like Danny's suggestion too  
Pepper
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I like Danny's idea for your title too .....
A beautifully written piece that speaks to me ....
L.,
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12 posted 03-19-2000 11:30 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Marilyn: I too like Danny's choice but it might not be 2nd, could 5th or 10th..LOL...I only hope it gets better the higher the number..

HUSG
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Thankyou all for your replies and suggestions.  

Danny...thankyou for the lovely response.  

James...yes I put a title on this piece but was not satisfied with it. That is why I asked for suggestions.

Rainbow....That is very true. It doesn't matter the number of times we have tried to find love but that someday we do find it. The only thing is with each attempt we lose a little more hope and burry ourselves deeper behind our walls. *sigh*

What do you think of "Another Chance for Love" or "Love's Other Chance." ?


Pepper
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" Loves Other Chance " ... sounds right to me, Marilyn ...  
 
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