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christies heart
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0 posted 2000-03-18 04:08 AM


Smiles are Saturday afternoon
on a sunny, sandy shore.

Whispers are the soft Sundays
for which we wish for more.

Yawns are Monday mornings,
new and somehow old.

Tears are restless Tuesday nights
when weary souls grow cold.

Concern for self is Wednesday's dawn
when faith lies just ahead.

Heavy sighs are Thursday eve,
a release of long-known dread.

Hugs are hopeful Friday nights,
soon we can let go.

Laughter is the long week's end
that finally lets us grow.


 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer



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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-03-18 09:26 AM


call it PERFECT!!
lovely, simple and sweet "ponderings"
very nice, take care jm

 Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne



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2 posted 2000-03-18 05:07 PM


ChristiesHeart~
This is very well done.
I like the thought behind each day.
Hmmmmm !  
How about calling it
'Calendar Of Events' ?
Or perhaps 'Marking Time'
No ... wait !
'Seven'
Now that's a title
that would draw me in !
~*Marge*~





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RainbowGirl
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3 posted 2000-03-19 06:34 PM


Anything that mentions HUGS just has to be PERFECT...

HUGS

Balladeer
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4 posted 2000-03-19 06:48 PM


It's an excellent poem. How about "Weekenings"?
christies heart
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5 posted 2000-03-20 05:06 AM


Janet Marie. You're feedback is always too nice. Thanks so much. By the way "perfect" is an idea I have been spinning in my brain for a totally different poem. Maybe soon.  

Marge...Thank you for the response. I like "Seven" and the way it connects. It is a title that will jump out at people...however it makes me think of that wacky movie with the wacky ending a few years ago..talk about something jumping out..or making you jump!

Rainbow Girl...Thank you very much...


Balladeer...I really like that idea. Thanks!!

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer



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