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Genetics knell

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 03-17-2000 08:21 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

        Genetics Knell

Dwindling the shadows fell,
Deepening the Zinfandel.
Painting brindle on the wall,
A mantilla's lacy shawl.

Behind the fan her eyes aglow,
Her bosom rose each breath in show.
And the ecstasy smoked my eyes.
And crossed my face in lusty sly.

I spoke to her in lovers muse,
Little things of little views.
Attempting in a subtle way,
To touch her heart in secret play.

The acid of her beauty ran,
Across the gentle moving fan.
And ate into the soul of me,
With golden shards of filigree.

And I was caught genetics knell,
A victim of hormonal dwell.

© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
RainbowGirl
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1 posted 03-17-2000 08:41 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Oh Sy....you do have a way with words...and filigree is so nice to work with.

HUGS

 I love the way I look in your eyes, I'm just me tho'...
We are all works in progress, no?

serenity blaze
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2 posted 03-17-2000 10:21 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Beautiful, lyrical and touching as always...
loved the ending by the way...I could absolutely smell crisply starched lace...
lovely...
Severn
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3 posted 03-17-2000 11:24 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Sy Sy Sy that vocab is getting WAY out of control!

What an explorative poem this is - I did enjoy, I did.

Well done as usual.

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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4 posted 03-17-2000 11:27 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Very well done, sir. Was that lusty sly or lusty Sy??
Nan
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5 posted 03-18-2000 09:10 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

ROTFLMAO....

Sy - I love reading your poems.. and I always look forward to your final couplet..

This one takes the cake, my friend... "hormonal dwell", indeed..
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 03-18-2000 09:11 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Rainbow, You do have a way with comments. *L*

Serenity, You always add a little bit of serenity to your comments. *L*

Severn, You really think so? Thank you. *L*

Balladeer, It was a little bit of both, nice comment.
Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 03-18-2000 01:09 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
Rainbow thiks that filigree
Is something really great to see
Serenity knows very well
The smell was from the Zinfandel
Kamla says your Poem gives
A hint of the "explorative"
She thinks the poet as a whole
Is getting way out of control
And Balladeer's lusty reply
Is badgering the lusty Sy
He thinks the "lusty sly" you sung
Was a lusty sly slip of the tongue
And Nan dwells on "hormonal dwell"
And she knows poetry very well
And so I sit here on the brink
And I just don't know what to think
I think that your hormonal well
Is laden with hormonal dwell
You're gettimg quite explorative
The more sly lusty words you give
And we are in hormonal dwell
Still reeling from the Zinfendel
So Sy, I don't know what to say
I hope you have a lusty day
Loved the poem
Love ya
Liz
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8 posted 03-18-2000 01:16 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Heh, excellent work Sy, now I need to go find my dictionary to understand the rest of the poem  
Meadowmuse
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9 posted 03-18-2000 01:33 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Creatively expressed, your desires
but I fancy 'twas more than Zin,
fanned Lust's fires


~ Claire
Martie
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10 posted 03-18-2000 01:34 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Me thinks behind the fan is where that lusty sly Sy's hormonal dwells...and what a wonderful sigh of a lover's muse you have.

Wonderful poem!!
Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 03-18-2000 02:40 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Nan, I love cake with my ZIN. *L* Sy

Elizabeth, I am overwhelmed by your poem. You have such a quick mind, It often blinds.
I trust the touch of wonderlust,
The upthrust of its windy gust,
Did not disturb the birds and bees.
Or add weight to some whiffletree.
Love Sy

Mistikman, By all means check with the dictionary, Thank you for the comment.

Meadow, Drink helps feed the fires of Zin. *L*

Martie, I love you dearly. Thank you Sy


 
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