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Corinne
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0 posted 03-17-2000 05:18 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corinne

Some hold the hands of the dying,
look into itís vacant face,
although it no longer resembles
the loved ones we canít replace.

Some cannot look into those eyes
smiling wanly, masking pain,
they understand how it hurts us,
and pray we donít feel shame.

They are the peaceful ones, now,
while we are left to marshal on,
so carry with you their spirits
thatís what love is built upon.

© 2000 CM Bailey


© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 03-17-2000 05:41 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Corinne, you see so clearly and it is so,  death and dying are hard to look at...yet it is somewhere we all travel.  You write so well and I loved the last stanza! ... so carry with you their spirits
thatís what love is built upon.
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2 posted 03-17-2000 05:42 PM       View Profile for Poeminister   Email Poeminister   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poeminister's Home Page   View IP for Poeminister

Dear Corinne,

This is a touching poem with a strong
message at it's closing.  Nicely done.

Poeminister
Marina
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3 posted 03-17-2000 06:21 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

This is beautiful Corinne! A very good way to think of those we love who have passed  to a better place. It reminds me very much of my Dad.

Marina
Corinne
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4 posted 03-17-2000 08:13 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Thank you Martie, Poeminister and Marina!

Corinne
Lone Wolf
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5 posted 03-17-2000 09:28 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Corinne....what more can I say?  Your words said it all.  Very touching....brings back memories of those that are lost.
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6 posted 03-17-2000 09:38 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is beautiful and comforting, Corinne. I especially loved the last two lines also! My heart needed to hear those words! Thank you.

Denise
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Sweet Corinne, this is a very warm, and a loving sentiment.

Thanks for sharing this.

Parker
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8 posted 03-18-2000 01:48 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corinne~
Lovely tears upon the page.
You touch us with your poetry.
Carrying the ~spirit~ ...
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Corinne
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9 posted 03-18-2000 02:33 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Dear Lone Wolf, Denise, Parker and Marge,
thank you!

XOXO

Corinne
tracie66
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10 posted 03-18-2000 03:25 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Corinne
Wise words softly spoken
this is exactly how it is
tracie


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
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Thank you so much, Corinne.

Rick
Nan
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12 posted 03-29-2000 07:36 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I think this one qualifies as one of your best.  Your opening verse is astounding (as is the rest)... Having seen that vacant stare, it really hits home with me... Thanks..
Elizabeth Santos
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13 posted 03-29-2000 07:41 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Words of love and truth. We do carry on their spirits and love. It goes on and on.
A wonderful poem, Corinne
Liz
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14 posted 03-29-2000 07:53 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Great poem... very well done!
Corinne
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15 posted 03-29-2000 10:08 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Thank you, Tracie.

Rick, most welcome, sweet poetry man.

Why thank you, Nan. Technically, it has some flaws, but my heart was in it, if that counts for anything! LOL

Thanks much, Liz and Suthern.

Corinne
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You make death beautiful if one can do such a thing  
Danny Holloway
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17 posted 03-29-2000 11:01 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Very touching poem on life's final journey.

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.
Corinne
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18 posted 03-29-2000 03:35 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Thank you kindly, Hoot and Danny.

Cor
 
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