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BluesforNarada
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since 2000-03-02
Posts 13


0 posted 2000-03-17 04:39 AM




FADES TO NIGHT


My good friends, my time has come
My life, my dreams, my hopes.
Hopes for a better world, dreams of me and you
My life has had so many twists and turns it
Would be as good as a bestseller.

But one sure thing is missing, one true white bright shaft of light
How I wish you were here by my side as
My ragged breath takes it’s last ebb and flow;
How I long for your gentle touch, for your soft brown long hair
To brush my face; for your soft lips to breathe gently upon my
Cracked and aged face.

My torn dreams take me back to when you and I were young,
Bright shimmering stars on a dark desolate and wasted Earth.
Your wonderful laughter rings through my ears, dancing as surely as fairies.
Your warm smile tugs my heart as I look back upon happy times;
My life then was complete as we danced together in the name of love divine
And as we gave up all for each other on the beautiful moonlit night.

But, alas, all was not to be as
Strong volcanoes and violent storms raged tempestuously as love turns to anger,
Burning like hot coals then simmering into embers.
As a ship I see only in my dark nightmares whisked
My beautiful friend away from me never for
Me to see her again, to hear her happy laughter, to see her wonderful smile.

My dear friends, now my time has come,
As my world fades from my aged and dim eyes.
But, my darling, I stayed true to you
Remember me, as my life and world
Fades to night.  

© Copyright 2000 BluesforNarada - All Rights Reserved
Enola
Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138
England
1 posted 2000-03-17 04:55 AM


This is great, I love the imagery, beauty and sincerity you have graced us with ... when are we going to see more?  

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.

angelswing
Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705
United Kingdom
2 posted 2000-03-17 05:24 AM


Hey Kev, Nice poem, I like the strength that you use in your poetry . Is there a second one up stairs in that rusty hulk of yours ? I wait with great anticipation . Cool stuf .
Tom


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
3 posted 2000-03-17 06:05 AM


I enjoyed this poem very much, so real, and so moving.  

 "Love is not love
Which alters when it alteration finds,
Or bends with the remover to remove.
O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare



tracie66
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
4 posted 2000-03-17 06:26 AM


A touching and heartfelt piece
I loved it very much
LoL tracie


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

BluesforNarada
Junior Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 13

5 posted 2000-03-17 07:18 AM


Thank you to all who have replied already to my poem. Wow, I've only put it on for a few minutes and I have four replies. I look forward to churning out a few more from my 'rusty hulk'.

Kevin

Cerenity
Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
6 posted 2000-03-17 09:54 AM


Hi BlueforNarada,

This was wonderful, look forward to more of your work.

Welcome to passions

Cerenity


[This message has been edited by Cerenity-1 (edited 03-17-2000).]

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