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jbowie
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since 2000-02-18
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BANGOR (that OR) ME

0 posted 2000-03-16 10:48 PM



The weather grayed wooden bench sagged
slightly beneath me as I gazed across the
wind stirred grass, watching the brittle tanned
leaves whirl about in somesault circles
like whimsical dogs chasing their tails

A soft breeze whistled by my ears quietly
whispering tales of places through which
it had flowed, leaving me with detailed
visions of deep azure seas and a birdlike
view of pale green treetop leaves

Slowly I removed my sun warmed flannel
shirt, balling it up into a suitable pillow
I languidly streched out along the bench
fading into a light nap while my eyes traced
the edeavors of pollen laden bees

Inwards through velvet shadows my
subconcious plied and brought forth
outward glances of miasmic clippings
revealing insights of import that my
mind felt the need to reveal

My dream spun like a tapestry woven from
a single strand of thread, winding along
it's current path always intertwining itself
among the memories within the fold that
resurfaced when touched even passingly

Some of the colors were vivid and fine
while other menaced both coarse and abrasive
refusing to remain unnoticed, as if the
pain once caused was insufficient for these
few malignant insidious fibers

But as the tapestry grew, the coarse
outlines seemed to fade and blend while
the brighter colors overlapped and hid them
from view, softening their appearance with
the assuaging passage of time

As I awoke, a pale divide seperated
my waking and dreaming worlds leaving
behind enough for me to see and understand
the shortfalls and the successes that build and
embody my past and help mold my future

From the west, swollen bruised clouds
intimated the coming of a storm, but for
this moments the cascades of luminous
sunlight dispelled all my haunting shadows
giving me a sense of hope and warmth to come

 A real man
kisses his children goodnight

© Copyright 2000 James Bowie - All Rights Reserved
jbowie
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BANGOR (that OR) ME
1 posted 2000-03-16 11:50 PM


well it is not really that long
Nan
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2 posted 2000-03-17 07:29 AM


This is really great, jb... Now, next time - don't tell them it's long... ..
Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
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3 posted 2000-03-17 10:30 AM


Hi jbowie,

I really enjoy the rides through your mind, You have such talent for making it so real.

Thank you, Cerenity

Denise
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4 posted 2000-03-18 12:35 PM


Long? I was at the end before I knew it! Your writings are so beautifully descriptive! They are a pleasure to read no matter the length!

Denise

RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
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5 posted 2000-03-19 06:26 PM


I didn't think it long either so I settled in with my cognac and I finished your poem first...

HUGS


Martie
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6 posted 2000-03-19 06:31 PM


What a wonderful trip into your vision and dreams...lovely imagery...
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 2000-03-19 08:47 PM


Was it really long?? I was so caught up in it I didn't notice  
Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
8 posted 2000-03-19 08:53 PM


Didnt find this long at all...I was too captured by it to notice I guess. I liked this a lot Jbowie! You have a way with words, tells a story and shares so much of yourself with all of us. Thanks so much!

Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

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