navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #6 » Surcease
Open Poetry #6
Post A Reply Post New Topic Surcease Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2000-03-16 08:51 PM


               Surcease

Surcease for me a rocking chair,
With naked feet high in the air.
Belching echoes' of moans and groans,
Resting this restless bag of bones.

Where little good of me remains,
With time worn hands and liver stains.
I boast another feature share,
The shakes became a cresting heir.

Some tokens heal, my cat surcease,
I knead her as I think on peace.
She answers me with purrs so loud,
They dull the closing aging shroud.

I quell within my rocking chair,
Sooth the flares of the pains I bear,
Reduce the groans and undertones
And try to rest this bag of bones.

With rest my eyes begin to close,
I drift away and start to doze.
And when I dose, I am passé,
Of age, of pain and resume.


© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Corinne
Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
1 posted 2000-03-16 08:55 PM


Wow, Seymour, I'd rank this as one of your best!

Especially liked:

"Some tokens heal, my cat surcease,
I knead her as I think on peace.
She answers me with purrs so loud,
They dull the closing aging shroud."

Awesome stanza!

Corinne

Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
2 posted 2000-03-16 10:36 PM


Sy, your bones are strong with the calcium of your magnificant art and I can see the muscle in your words.
Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
3 posted 2000-03-16 11:06 PM


Corinne,
Thank you so much, a beautiful comment. *L*

Martie,
A wonderful and clever comment. *L*

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
4 posted 2000-03-16 11:08 PM


With rest my eyes begin to close,
I drift away and start to doze.
And when I dose, I am passé,
Of age, of pain and resume.

In sleep we can leave it all behind and soar can't we    This is a grand work of art Sy, I loved it!

Meadowmuse
Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

5 posted 2000-03-16 11:51 PM


A fine commentary on the peaceful repose of an obviously full and busied soul.

~ Claire

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
6 posted 2000-03-17 05:31 AM


Sy...you ready for a rocking chair?? Never!!!  
Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
7 posted 2000-03-17 07:32 AM


Seymour~
A bag of bones
is not what I see
within the art
of your poetry.

It is with honor
I would say
to get the chance
to read your resume.

YOU ROCK ... POETIC ONE
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Pepper
Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
8 posted 2000-03-17 08:07 AM


Hey .... I know you Sy, and you, my dear, are definetly NOT an old bag of bones    
I love this piece ....
Love ya,
Shannon

[This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 03-17-2000).]

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
9 posted 2000-03-17 08:33 AM


Sy,
I've never seen a bag of bone
So full of youthful undertones
I never saw a aged soul
Physique built of a thirty year old
I never saw a purring cat
To keep up with the likes of that
Great poem,
Love ya
Liz


Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
10 posted 2000-03-17 01:27 PM


Butterfly, Thank you I enjoyed your comment.

Meadow, Very thoughtful comment. Thank you *L*

Hoot, All tongue in cheek, thank you. *L*

Marge, You are the greatest. *L* Sy

Pepper, Well I forgot to tell you I just had a body transplant. LOL *L*

Elizabeth, Well I guess it all depends on the company. Love Sy

Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

11 posted 2000-03-17 09:06 PM


I guess some days we all feel like that!! Wonderful poem, Sy! Now get out of that rocking chair!!

Denise

Mistikman
Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA
12 posted 2000-03-17 11:46 PM


This is excellent Sy. Cats are wonderful for releasing pent up emotions arent they?  
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #6 » Surcease

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary