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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 03-16-2000 06:53 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

An opinion

Writing poetry as I post
Is what I like to do the most
It's not the best by any means
But I've got rhythm, so it seems

I don't mind a good critique
Learning more is what I seek
But I would simply like to say
That rhyme and meter's my forte

So please don't throw more words at me
It throws my meter off, you see
I like suggestions, that is fine
But don't mess with my perfect time

Now as for Martie's splendid verse
It's just about the best on earth
Her perfect verse and perfect prose
Are perfect dew on a perfect rose

Would you teach a priest to pray?
Or teach the sun to light the day?
Then how can you improve the best
That goes beyond the greatest quest

For Martie's work is so superb
In perfect phrase and perfect word
That when I read suggested change
My mind became a bit deranged

A poet's poem, when it is done
Should not be changed by anyone

Elizabeth Santos
© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 03-16-2000 07:13 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Liz sweety, what a wonder you are to write this ... as for your rhyme and perfect time I say you are the best and your timing is perfect....and what you said about my poetry...I am blushing...and don't really know what to say except thank you and I love you lots!
Corinne
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2 posted 03-16-2000 07:30 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Elizabeth,

you go, lady!

Timing is everything, and the beat goes on!

Corinne
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3 posted 03-16-2000 07:43 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

I really like this poem Liz, and I agree with it.. (although I'm stuck on free-form... lol)  

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
Pepper
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4 posted 03-16-2000 07:47 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Liz,
Right on .. with finesse ...  
I totally agree ... Martie's poetry is exceptional and the finest I've ever read .......
Miss You,
Shannon


[This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 03-16-2000).]
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 03-16-2000 08:35 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Elizabeth, my friend~
I concur with this lovely rendering.
The things I write also come from my
heart and fall by design to the page.
Wonderful volley fired for a friendship.
I admire your spunk.
Love you ~*Marge*~




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 03-16-2000 08:43 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Elizabeth,
With rhyme and verse you are a whizz
And a poet for the ages.
LOve Sy
suthern
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7 posted 03-16-2000 09:02 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Your rhymes and rhythms are the best
But that's not poetry's only test -
Word choice and meter are but a part
Of poetry written from the heart.
How I applaud your sentiment
And know your friendship's heaven sent!

Wonderful poem, Elizabeth... long may you and Martie grace these forums with your beautiful words so perfectly written!
Balladeer
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8 posted 03-16-2000 09:29 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Martie's ok, I guess...ROTFLMAO!!
Denise
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9 posted 03-17-2000 07:45 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Asking for a critique is one thing. Getting it when not asking for it is another. I agree. Our poems to us are like our children. If you don't have anything kind to say, don't say anything. Good one, Liz!

Denise
 
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