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Forever in this Lasting of Me

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Martie
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Forever in this Lasting of Me

I have fallen into your eyes
and now you say it’s time
to close them and flow
across time’s eternity,
lost except to memory
and withered sweet decay.

Take me with you
to that place of grace,
part the curtain and let me see
your angel wings in motion glazed
with the tears that I have made.

The sound you breathe
holds such tenderness
it will feather
across my dreaming
if  you bring
in sleep this song
for my gathering.

If I could keep your laugh
that has rippled
and whistled ‘cross my pond,
I’d hold it safe
in black mantilla lace
with butterflies and silk
in a drawer that love opens.

Then your dark frailty
would not find weeping
in this stabbing
that bleeds me dry,
and time’s precious minutes
that in daring tick you out
would be forever

in this lasting of me.

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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Immeasurably sad! Left me near tears.....
Marge Tindal
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2 posted 03-16-2000 08:15 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
I once told Seymour that to live a fortnight with his muse would be heavenly ... I now pay you the same compliment.

You have the most unique way of walking through an experience with feather-light steps.  No one, whose writings I'm familiar with, does it quite like you.

One of the treasures of belonging to this wonderful family of pssionate poets is the pleasure of having met you and your poetry.

This particular poem is so soft that it calls my name and I have to turn my ear to the wind to be certain that it whispered my name.  I smile in knowing that it did.

This is just perfection in poetry on display.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Martie,
The essence of cycloramos beauty. Exquisite.
*L* Sy
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There is something in your phrase "the lasting of me," and indeed, in the entire work, Martie, that feels so real in the reading of this delicacy. Beautiful, thank you.

~ Claire
Martie
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Pdv--it is immeasurably sad

Marge--What a wonderful thing to say..if I knew where my muse was half the time then I would share gladly.

Sy--your words make my heart happy

Claire--your sweet comments are alway appreciated!
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So sad yet so lovely ... only you Martie, only you 'sigh'
Love,
Shannon
Elizabeth Santos
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Martie,
It is quite obvious where your muse is. It is in your heart. But your poetic brilliance comes from heart and mind, and both are exquisite. All the great poets of this forum recognize your exceptional talents. You are an amazing poet, an amazing woman, and I am so proud to call you my friend.
Love
Liz
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I'm with Marge,

your poetry makes me want to come to your house, discuss poetry and thoughts and compose.  Your spirit is a gentle one, and your use of imagery is something I inspire to reach towards.

Corinne
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9 posted 03-17-2000 12:04 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

A truly wonderful but sad piece Martie. You express yourself so well.

Marina
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Shannon--thank you for sighing with me

Liz--Your friendship is cherished along with your words

Corinne--Come on over--where do you live?  I'd love to see you and talk about what a talented poet you are.

Marina--Sad yes, but about loving, so happy.
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Why does it have to hurt so much? Thanks for sharing this heartfelt beautiful piece, Martie.

Denise
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Such emotional intensity you impart, my friend.. Very nicely done..
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I can feel this sadness papable to my touch- I can taste it in my tongue- Feel it in my gut - It wrenches my heart- I know it is real - but more significantly - that you could pen such sadness with such beauty - leaves me breathless
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