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Forest without any Trees

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pmc
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0 posted 03-16-2000 03:15 PM       View Profile for pmc   Email pmc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pmc

I feel overwhelmed with all this love Poetry
Am in the wrong place or is it just the time of year?
Here is something not so romantic.


Forest without any Trees.

Lord if you're listening. Help me O please,
Iím lost in a forest without any trees.
If you can hear, please shine something bright,
Guide me safely back into the light.

Yes I am listening Iím here at your side,
If you need assistance, Iíll be your guide.
The roads through this forest are all made of sand,
But youíll get there beside me if you just take my hand.

Lord since I came to this forest I canít find my way,
I canít tell the difference between night and day.
But I have to keep running just to try stay ahead,
For the wolfs in this forest they will be fed.

From wolfs you can hide but its best not to run,
They will always run faster my son.
The wolfs in this forest they all feed on fear,
But if they canít smell it, they won't come near.

Lord they can smell it, for I tremble with fright,
My life has been a permanent night.
I have been running since I was born,
Give me the strength to last until dawn.

P.J. Mc Fadden    

© Copyright 2000 Patrick McFadden - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 03-16-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Poetry moves like a snake through our 'family'....right now, love is in the air.

I like your poem....This is the first of your work I read. Welcome to the family! I hope you enjoy your stay..please feel free to peruse the other forums!
Corinne
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2 posted 03-16-2000 08:49 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne


Yes, it's true, love is in the air, must be springtime!

Your poem is dark and mysterious, and maybe,just maybe sometimes we write of happy things to mask the forest in all of us.

Love your writing style, btw.

Corinne
pmc
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3 posted 03-22-2000 12:01 PM       View Profile for pmc   Email pmc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pmc

Corinne
Thank you for your comments.
Sorry to have taken so long to reply.
I was away.

Poet de Vine

Thank you for your comments also.
I might add that it is not the first of my work you have read.

"Magnificent tale. Welcome to the family! I love this poem because I can feel it! Please check your email!"

Were you just being kind?

Pat
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4 posted 03-22-2000 01:59 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Not all poems have to be about love! You are in the right place for sure. This is a great poem about the fears and trials that we all face.

Just a note: Poet deVine was not just being kind. As moderators we read thousands of poems and sometimes we forget the names of the poets whose works we have read. That doesn't mean that the piece by you that she read did not make an impact on her when she read it. I hope that clears that up for you!  
 
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