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She Dreamed Of Flight (An Acrostic Sestina)
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She Dreamed Of Flight (An Acrostic Sestina) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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(This poem was a long time coming, I only hope I did it justice)  She Dreamed Of Flight (An Acrostic Sestina) She lived trapped in a gilded cage Open doors only a dream Mystical, the clouds for her Eyes forever on the skies Transfixed with images of flight Inspired by her damaged wings Molted feathers from her wings Encased the bottom of her cage She wondered if she’d ever fly Ever realize her dreams Venture high up in the skies Enchanting clouds surrounding her Night after night, dreams came to her As she longed to spread her wings Soft, misty visions of blue skies Intrigued her there within her cage Nights haunted by these longing dreams Gave rise to days with hopes of flight Lost in images of flight Each day became a quest for her Forever reaching for her dreams Envisioned flight on flawless wings Avenging life within her cage Transcending bars to reach the skies Harbinger to freedom’s skies Enraptured in her quest for flight Resigned no more inside her cage Songs of reproach emit from her Enticing her to spread her wings No longer lost within her dreams Outward now, beyond her dreams Unleashed, she rises in calm skies Gracefully on outstretched wings High in the cloudy air she flies Taken once, freedom’s now hers Outside the bounds of her own cage Far away now from her gilded cage Life had once been cruel to her Yet through her dreams, she learned to fly < !signature--> The poet's job is to put into words those feelings we all have that are so deep, so important, and yet so difficult to name, to tell the truth in such a beautiful way that people cannot live without it. ~Jane Kenyon [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 03-16-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Hoot~ this is amazing! I just love it!  -SEA |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
*stalking the elusive 'hoot'er through the high grass, pouncing, only earning feathers for this foray* Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!!! The message is inspiring, the form exquisite, the acrostic phenomenal. Hoot, you not only succeeded, but surpassed your attempt at doing this sestina justice. Bravo! Huzzah! Zounds! Alicat the Persnikitty |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks Sea and Alicat...for those of you who don't have the patience to figure this one out...the acrostic is: Sometimes even a single feather's enough to fly |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful poem, Hoot... and thanks for the help... I obviously don't read vertically very well... I wasn't sure what "Some times even a sin glefeat hers enough to fly" meant! LOL glefeat had me defeated! LOL |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Heaven sent on feathered wings, Owl flies in calm of night, On whispering winds her beauty sings, To join her in her flight. Owl can also angel be, With heart as pure as gold, Loving, caring, spirit free. Romantic as soft taper's light, Nesting now in morn's first light. Exceptional poem Hoot... truly enjoyed. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 03-16-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hoot~ This is so well-done. Lovely, meaningful and so full of hope. Your talent is to be admired, my friend .. and I do. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Suthern...I do the same thing sometimes, thank you by the way Mike...what can I say but thanks, what a nice acrostic Marge, well I just happen to be a big fan of your work too. Thank you |
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Chandni New Member
since 2000-03-14
Posts 4Bangalore, India |
Hello hoot, Gosh ! What can I say ? I've read almost all your poems in this forum... and each time, you out-do yourself. May you fly higher and touch the sky, hoot. Regards, Chandni ciniway@yahoo.com |
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Ravenlearns2fly Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 71 |
Your words are inspiring I too am learning to fly. Raven WARNING!!!!! I can not spell!!!! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
You should be very proud, Hoot ... This is an exceptional piece !!! Bravo, my friend ..... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ruth this is beautiful, I admire your talent honey. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Astounding work, Ruth - how could you even think you didn't do it justice? This is what poetry is all about. Michael |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Justice! Justice! You did well, Ruth. You combined a good idea with excellent words in a difficult rhyme scheme and threw in an acrostic for good measure to create an exemplary poem. I admire the work you put into your writing. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Wow Ruth. This is an amazing piece of work. The time and effort you put into this piece shines through. Bravo. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth, you have made a remarkable, beautiful poem and I applaud the thought and care that went into the form and meaning. Bravo! |
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wildbill58 Junior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 19 |
tooh meop taerg |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Ruth: I read your sestina earlier but didn't have time to post. This is a remarkable accomplishment. One wonders what prompted you to torment yourself so.  If you want to best this effort, Pete (Not A Poet) and I have perfected a double-sestina format. Let me know. *evil laugh* Beautiful poem. Jim |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Not much can be added except my own words of praise for your talent...an incredible poem! Truely amazing!  |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
I love the acrostic, Ruth! It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Chandni, Ranev, Pepper, DA, Michael, Balladeer, Martie, Wildbill, PDV, and Tara....thank you all for your support of this one and your wonderful comments. I actually started this poem about 6 months ago and wrote a few lines putting it back for a rainly day that never caame and a bit of inspiration. I'd pick it up from time to time and write a line or to and become so frustrated I'd put it back away again. I decided last night I was going to finish it and picked it up and it all just came together Jim....I think I'll have to pass on the double sestina thank you anyway I was questioning my sanity after attempting this one |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
And fly she does! Great Ruth |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Smiling...thank you Whtdove |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
What does one say to this, Ruth? A sestina is difficult to write.. An acrostic (especially one of this length) is difficult... You've combined them and done a great job of it. This poem must be one of your most treasured personal accomplishments. You've definitely learned to fly with a single feather to lift you... Wonderful..  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Ruth, Patience, brilliance, poetic grace, passion, superb phrasing, splendid thoughts, all these woven into a sestina, a beautiful tapestry, a work of art. BRAVO from one who knows a labor of love. Liz |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
clapping hands No praise could do justice to your talent and poetry Ruth!! AWESOME!!! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nan...thank you, yes because of the time involved in this and even more, the subject matter....this is now one of my favorites Liz...thank you oh so much Moonmoon...nice to see you drop by to read, thank you |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Hoot You have done justice here, this is amazing and I just found it so beautiful and you know how I love acrostc's. ~MAGNIFICENT~ tracie Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is excellent, Ruth! WOW! You have done a wonderful job here! Denise |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
This is beautiful Ruth! A single feather indeed, and you with enough to soar into the heavens themselves! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Tracie, Denise and Christopher...thank you all kindly for reading and commenting |
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