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Severn
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0 posted 03-16-2000 01:30 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn




It is the warmth
  of a summered day
and it swims to me
your memory

and the smile
  that recalls the taste
of childhood trees
and safety  

the autumn susurrates near
  carrying her leaves
and brown lit hues
immortalising

the shed tears
  of the love-barren
Iím braving the loss
and the beat of steps

solitude makes

        yes

I can perform
  through the false
heat that will seep
from tomorrow

raise my hands and
  let the sun take
the life of crickets
and the imprint of you

   to another place


  



[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 03-16-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 03-16-2000 02:43 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Uh, let me borrow that hand when you're done with it.  There's an imprint over here that needs removing...LOL  Severn, as always, you take my breath away.  This tingled.  "braving the loss", indeed.


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2 posted 03-16-2000 02:49 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kamla~
Wow ... exquisite.
You engraved your signature
all overthis one.  Fantastic.
~*Marge*~


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Raintime
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3 posted 03-16-2000 04:14 AM       View Profile for Raintime   Email Raintime   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Raintime

Severn -
until now I had never thought of Summer as something which might be performed upon one. I particularly like your linebreaks and indents - the way with which pauses allow memory to filter in. Where is 'another place' and how do we get there?
I love this.
Thank you.
R.T
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4 posted 03-16-2000 04:51 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Oh Kamla, I am at a loss for words, this is breathtaking and so very beautiful.
Excellent as always Soul-Sis.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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5 posted 03-16-2000 11:56 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Kamla...this is a beautful work you have crafted here. Enchanting and tender, your heart shows through your words  
Martie
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6 posted 03-16-2000 02:34 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Kamla, please pass the oxygen--I think I need it more than you do--this poem is remardable...

...let the sun take
the life of crickets
and the imprint of you..

wonderful!
Marilyn
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7 posted 03-16-2000 03:25 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Breath taking Kamla. Wondeful piece. Is there a place and if you find the way, will you show me?  
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8 posted 03-16-2000 04:16 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I wanna go, too!! This is beautiful, Kamla. My awe for your work continues.

oops! Speaking of recall, I recall I owe you a letter    COMING!!!!!
Pepper
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9 posted 03-16-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Oh my Kamla ....
Once again your words leave me breathless and in amazement of your exquisite talent .....
Superb ..

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 03-16-2000 06:01 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Severn,
With just the simplest of touch,
You took away my dreamers crutch.
Bravo a wonderful poem. *L* Sy
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11 posted 03-16-2000 06:59 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

You travel to such mystical places, Severn, very intriguing to the mind and senses!

Corinne
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12 posted 03-16-2000 10:19 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

This is beatuiful Severn. . .the summer holds many dreams and rememberances for most of us, well done. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Severn
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13 posted 03-17-2000 11:19 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Michael - hehe, of course you can and thankyou, that was a really nice thing to say.  

Marge(y) - cheers sweetie!

RT - You know that other place I think is somewhere where one can forget the crap and all of the precious memories become real again - some kind of invented heaven? I don't know. Thankyou.

Soul Sis - thanks dear.  

Ruth - wow - enchanting is a beautiful label to attach - thanks!

Martie - that's it my friend, it's off to the hospital we go...

thankyou.

Marilyn - If I ever do then I certainly will - same goes - you find one then please tell me!!

'Deer - humph! Still waiting! Hehe - thanks slowish One.

Shannon - I really appreciate that, thankyou so much.

Sy - Master of poetry, what can I say - I am the dreamer's nemesis! Thanks my friend.

Corinne - yes, but there are so many hard roads...thnakyou  

Sven - hey, nice to hear your voice - indeed I am inclined to agree. Thankyou.

K

Denise
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14 posted 03-17-2000 11:41 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful recall, Severn!  

Denise
 
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